:::radical Orator:::

I’m a drastic bastard captured by heathens and kathars
Crack spliff masters scatter the streets seeking the pastor
who sold rocks from his confession box seething with cancers
controlled blocks with concession plots receiving the slander
who flock with different wings:::The masses masturbated there feathers
despots do wicked sins:::Exasperating our measures
and from the heaven’s:::Global prohibited weapons bomb the peasants
among the reverend's:::Social exhibited sessions con for severance
of wealth from villages they stealthily pillaged with wickedness
withheld the dividends:::selfishly grimaced the spirited-
-steeds who galloped::Betrayed by their leaders of faith
reeking havoc and slayed for their greedy mistakes
the arteries of earth regurgitated the contents of death
for larceny of birth::I perforated the nonsense you breathed
and conquered what's left of your conscience ascent
in the strongest event i responded with strength
bonding with the honoured descent.....
sidituous speakers radical orators rip through your speaches of weakness
I'm reaching for deepness-
-shallow nigguz get splashed in a puddle of faeces
the greatest is me by far:::5 star P.I. R::Ryme hard to release my bars

....this was hot hot hot! good shit man! way to rewrite and make this piece just plain: better...

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Originally Posted by BlakFuryan

I’m a drastic bastard captured by heathens and kathars
Crack spliff masters scatter the streets seeking the pastor
who sold rocks from his confession box seething with cancers
controlled blocks with concession plots receiving the slander
who flock with different wings:::The masses masturbated there feathers
despots do wicked sins:::Exasperating our measures
and from the heaven’s:::Global prohibited weapons bomb the peasants
among the reverend's:::Social exhibited sessions con for severance
of wealth from villages they stealthily pillaged with wickedness
withheld the dividends:::selfishly grimaced the spirited-
-steeds who galloped::Betrayed by their leaders of faith
reeking havoc and slayed for their greedy mistakes
the arteries of earth regurgitated the contents of death
for larceny of birth::I perforated the nonsense you breathed
and conquered what's left of your conscience ascent
in the strongest event i responded with strength
bonding with the honoured descent.....

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....i really enjoyed reading this piece.... the first eight bars we're crazy ill... i'm really feeling those quoted... i felt like the end that it was like a bar or two after you finished, you just added a little, not bad at all, just didn't compare to the begining... keep scripting fam', and one...

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Originally Posted by BlaK FuRYaN

I’m a drastic bastard captured by heathens and kathars
Crack spliff masters scatter the streets seeking the pastor
who sold rocks from his confession box seething with cancers
controlled blocks with concession plots receiving the slander
who flock with different wings:::The masses masturbated there feathers
despots do wicked sins:::Exasperating our measures
and from the heaven’s:::Global prohibited weapons bomb the peasants
among the reverend's:::Social exhibited sessions con for severance
of wealth from villages they stealthily pillaged with wickedness
withheld the dividends:::selfishly grimaced the spirited-
-steeds who galloped::Betrayed by their leaders of faith
reeking havoc and slayed for their greedy mistakes
the arteries of earth regurgitated the contents of death
for larceny of birth::I perforated the nonsense you breathed
and conquered what's left of your conscience ascent
in the strongest event i responded with strength
bonding with the honoured descent.....
sidituous speakers radical orators rip through your speaches of weakness
I'm reaching for deepness-
-shallow nigguz get splashed in a puddle of faeces
the greatest is me by far:::5 star P.I. R::Ryme hard to release my bars

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Hell YEah That is wicked whimsical wordplay wizardry

yeah your final draft ..... shit I'm spitting write now

Good shit man. Solid piece. I hope to come back to this later and read it again in detail. The content interests me.

I had almost forgotten your style!!!!!!!
But a nice verse as always, i checked your lyical content has differed for the better, sometimes it seemed as though the verse went and stopped at each sentence, but started again. But it just seems as an effect (mainly at the beginning of the verse), whilst at the end well need i say more:
"shallow nigguz get splashed in a puddle of faeces" ,



Peace

Peace to Matyr,Ben,Noel and Gone....i definately appreciate the feedback....twards the end i got abit lazy, but that was becuase i was eagar to post it up....

Onece again, much love for the feed....

BLAK that was stunning yo, you dropped some heatrocks!

*sighs*... even though you did say it:, i didn't think you'd actually jack my flow, bruh... as far as content goes it was pretty good though... i love to see people usin' multies, but please try to develop your own style... do you, y'know...? let me do me, 'cause i do me best... feel me...? that's honest feedback... you've got definite potential, but i think you robbed yourself of an actual improvement by attemptin' my formula... i'll just ask you kindly to make your own path...

PEACE

PSY

seen


peace

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Originally Posted by PsYkOsUs

*sighs*... even though you did say it:, i didn't think you'd actually jack my flow, bruh... as far as content goes it was pretty good though... i love to see people usin' multies, but please try to develop your own style... do you, y'know...? let me do me, 'cause i do me best... feel me...? that's honest feedback... you've got definite potential, but i think you robbed yourself of an actual improvement by attemptin' my formula... i'll just ask you kindly to make your own path...

PEACE

PSY

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