Quick Draw McGraw

just a quite ol day in the west for quick and baba
no oj, winonas, ok, we spittin slobber
me and babaluie start a cypher lookin for spar mates
i snatched some dude we had locked up after a car chase
spit yo game dunny, lemme loosen the cuffs
he said u first, i proceeded to chewin him up
never a loss for the boss bitch thats a sad given
punchline after punch wit babalouie ad libbin (ooooh)
i tol babalouie chill lets peep the skills a bit
the dilegent criminal militent went into killin it
damn thats some illin shit..till i herd familiar rhymes
fuckin THIEF! sucked my teef, pulled out gats to fill his spine
baba located the shotty and shitty shank while
the pro of rhyme coppy thru ghostwrittens rhymes at me wild!
mead compostion grazed my fade leavin my mane torn
while shame swarmed me as he stormed off i changed forms....

eeellll Kabong!!:dududu:

tumbleweeds and stray dustmites cross my visible path
masked by lyrical wrath, i hear the criminals pitiful laff
i gallop forth on all 4's 2 hinds and 2 44's
this means war savage cabbage splittin sword gore
louie lays numb, recycled rhymes punctured his gut
my thunderous strut, and gallops are suitable for cuttin scallop
and essentially thats exactly what i came to do
mentally this rhyme thiefs brain is obviously inhumanely screwed
"show yourself coward, dont make this hard on the both of us
you kno u suck, and if u spit our rhymes u shooda quoted us"
out of the smokin dust, he busted automatics off
punchline, similie, metaphor verses illmatic lost-
he empty'd off completly leaving only gun smoke
as i pierced thru it's cloud, ascending the way the sun floats
his dumb founed expression changed, the strike was hella strong
as he sang his jail song..wit six strings you could call me El Kabong...

to be recorded....

Pretty good verses, the flow was straight foward, no unbalances an shit, story was on some cartoon beef shit to me, it was kinda funny that the one character caught fellins over a biter like that though, that's why its like cartoon beef to me. Some of the slang in the first verse had me confused, kinda made sense by then end though.

8.6/10

thanks..and the flow has to do with the slow beat 1

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Song...and btw i wrote those verses collectively in about 7 minutes...i went as i herd the beat...1

shit was nice

but dun be affraid to compromise sum words and/or syllables when recording
cuz i hear u left out a couple and sped up ya spittin'
nt such a major problem tho...beat came out nice too
nice job

PEACE

thanks dog..more feed? 1

tight lol i like the beat 8/10

was good Dusk.. Let's do a joint bruv

good use of story-like lyrics

Lyrics were pretty cool. Nice story telling. Wasn't into the audio though. That beat was rough on the ears, especially combined with the poor sound quality of the vocals. The idea was cool. The beat suited but was just hard on the ears. Could definately use some fine tuning. Like Tuco said, it wouldn't hurt to change some lines when recording. Leave a word or 2 out of the longer lines. Some lines really hurt your flow because you could hear that you were rushing to get the whole thing out before the next bar. Could be a nice track if you cleaned it up though.