A Dish Served

I dont drop that often but i just got the net at home so i'll be posting a lot more regularly n gettin involved n that u no.... heres something out the crates;

What an existence man,
i'm city livin driven by a vision,
a rapper self-taught thoughts of lackin peer support,
my pen'll liberate,ya mind was froze,
i got a goal 2 be the father that myself has never known,
so fuckin fire it up n start a bush fire kid i'm charged like a live-wire,
u in ma line of fire,make a move man ya stuck in a groove,
ma heds trapped in ma bennie hat, survivin off homegrown,
i blown the chance.
The opportunity knocked but thanks kid i tink i'll pass,left a deep gash,
fucked up but i still smash ya critics,
lights'll flicker while ya walls shake,
from the first earthquake to hit Britain since whenever,
crackin crusts like a whipcrack of leather,
i change my style like the Great British weather,
tainted inkpen, ma digi's weigh trhe heavier,
i got a g plate tranny van to rid ov ya,
ya like the timepiece sat on the meridian,
cuttin n patch it,
ma mindstates like av you seen the state of mine mate?
Never mind i'm on a permanant taxbreak

wack

peace

You have an interesting style, but you need to work on you flow. Lyrical content was okay as you played around with your words. Quite nice though.

Peace
PS: Keep posting, would like to see more of your verses.

you need to elevate man

the flow was terrible in places
there were a couple ok lines
but keep spittin practice makes perfect
just be more creative wit it