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PEACE... i liked this, it reminded me of Jean Grae's "haters anthem"... even if it was just fuckin' around, i love to see people post verses like these, 'cause cats are so sensitive on this forum they all feel offended in some shape or form... no need to name names, they know who they are, and they know they need to step they're game up! keep them on their toes, 'cause this verse could've easily set the battlefield into a panic...
PEACE
PSY
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When I think of Poetry, I think of the wind beneath my wings
soaring to new heights, viewing all that life brings
all things ...
become anew, for this art shines a different light
it embraces the ills of this world and somehow makes wrongs seem right
magically turning adversities into an impossible victories
mysteries begin to unravel as we travel through out history
unlocking secret tombs and giving voices to Taboos
illuminating dark places, creating faces from lost clues
nothing is unknown ... for it enables the mind to dream
putting everything within our grasp, no matter how inconceivable they seem
silent screams ...
are now heard because Poetry has given them a voice
cries that once fell upon def ears, now have reason to rejoice
to me, it’s life’s essence ... the very force that drives me
like the blood pumping through my veins, it keeps me alive, see ...
Poetry is who I am ...
the continuous rhythm of my soul
the fire contained within that runs wild and grabs hold,
of the smallest hint of imagination, turning stray thoughts into great visions
manifested into fruition ...
... it’s the teacher of life’s lessons-never requestin’ a tuition
It’s gives the smallest life-a true purpose,
a creative mind-a new surface ...
to draw upon whatever desires the heart inspires into service
all these things and more, are reasons I will always adore
Poetry
and her depth ... I will endlessly explore
How about you?
That was deep, very nice wordplay, it flowed nicely in my head, and I didn't need a beat, so that's Ill, peace.
It was tight, keep it real holmes, 10 / 10
pssst..... Holmes is a Lady, :)
LOL ... yes, I am. Thanks for the feedback you two. I really appreciate it. Check out the link to hear it.Quote:
Originally Posted by SurreaL
Peace
I heard it, it was sweet, peace.
it's all the same amigo ;)
I always, always grow from your words. I only got a chance to listen, cause I'm at work, but I'll give you some good feedback soon. Your words are indescribable. I'm holding back what I really want to say, but I thank God for the ability to be able to receive your words.
peace
nice. keep at it ssiter. peaceQuote:
Originally Posted by Dae Ja Nae
Wow! first off, lemme just say that your audio is ill... you had a very nice delivery, and a very nice voice too; you're very talented... it felt like i was watchin' you on Def Poetry Jam, did you record that in a studio, or into your computer with a mic?
now your lyrics were very insightful... i'd like to say it was thoughful, but i don't think this one was written with anythin' other than pure heart... i get the feelin' it just flowed effortlessly onto the page... and from a technical standard it was written beautifully, a nice blend of strong vocabulary and artful simplicity... i don't have much else to say, other than keep doin' what you do... and lemme know when to watch for you on Def Poetry...
PEACE
PSY
great piece, deep...like psy says it seems like it just flowed raw from your mind to the paper
beautiful little analogies and comparrisons
props
Thanks to everyone for sharing your thoughts on this piece. Encouraging words are always welcomed and appreciated.Quote:
Originally Posted by PsYkOsUs
black, thanks for always holding me down ... you know how we do ... and how we think. The same can be said about you my brotha ... :yes: *D ... you know what they say ... great minds baby, great minds ;)
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Psy, thanks for the compliments ... :) ... and you are exactly right ... it was a stray thought at first, and the rest just followed. After I read it, I was moved by it's powerful simplicity, so I recorded it (onto my computer with a mic). I always try to approach Poetry from the heart ... because I love Her.
Peace
Fantastic!! I felt the emotion injected in this piece, and longed for it all over again after I finished reading. I couldnt access the link but would love to hear it from the voice of the writer. I look forward to reading more from you, keep posting
wow Dae you sure no how to move a person this piece has a feel to it as if you just released a big breathe from with in... it seems you needed to get this out and it just poured outta you..PEACE
Thank you both ... as always, it's appreciated.
yo Dae check your mail....i gotta picture i think you might like.....
Man fuck this candy ass shit. When I think of poetry I think of pain, misery, torture, murder, and bludgeoning motherfuckers to death. None of this pansy let's all have a group hug bullshit. Fuck that. I murder motherfuckers in cold blood, then use my wicked rhyme kicking ability to recount it.
LOL at this lame ass clown ...Quote:
Originally Posted by Murderous Mack
This is a serious piece and should therefore be respected likewise. I really liked the style and form of your verse. It gives me the feeling you really put in the effort and emotion to build this verse.
Peace
Thank you ...
damn, that was nice. i'm feeling your imagery a lot, its vivid and conveys your message very well. i checked out the audio and that was good too. i really like your style. please post more, this was a very enjoyable piece to read
peace
i would explore if it came with a condom :P j/p Dae, i loved it, listen to it, might listen to it again, i love the way your thought pattern gives off a clear strait vision..........
word, thats mad nice!
good stuff
when i read this one, i got that tune of dear summer in my head, fits perfect.
Once again, thanks to everyone for the love, and props to all who felt my piece, but please know that for me that's not what it's all about. Any criticism, be it positive or negative, serves a purpose to a true writer. Not ever person that views another's work is going to approve of said work. I am more than aware that people have different opinions as well as tastes. Because it is so, I also know that I will never be able to satisfy the palate of every individual. In my opinion, negative comments help a person to grow and become stronger/better, so I am not offended by them, and actually view them as stepping stones to success. However, it's the blatant disrespect that I dislike. So ... if you choose to be disrespectful, it's all good, but please know that ... I AM THAT CHICK ... I'll serve that shit right back to your ass ... RAW.
Peace
Thanks Spoken ... yeah, those were better times ... The Poet's Corner. I still miss it ... and My 4 Horsemen ... lol ...
That thread contained some real jewels ... so much talent. I really miss reading them all, we all contributed to the insightful inspiration that was felt there. Hopefully we'll be able to build some new memories in time ...
who knows :)
Peace
PS: I'm down for whatever ... still waiting for that beat ... ;)
Damn Mami...............
reading it word for word made me like it even more....
damn......
eye am speechless...
good work.
peace the older God.
p.s. still waiting on your verse and what direction we gonna take this...
you know where to find me
Kingz and Queenz for life!
thats deep thats a level i'm tryin to get to keep posting
whoa ... it slipped my mind ... sorry ... I'll get at it soon and let you know.Quote:
Originally Posted by NAKHI the SOLORIAN
Peace
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^^^ ;) ... :d
I dont think this lacks fighting spirit at all...To me, the descriptive & emotional language of the verse leads me to think that you are neck deep in your battle, letting off a little steam, and gathering yourself for your next move. I liked it! Keep the ink flowing
ONE LOVE
Thanks EF ... I'm glad you enjoyed the read ...Quote:
Originally Posted by Elusive-Fugitive
You are very much correct. This is my verse from a collab that I did with CD ... :looking: ... it was centered around my frustration with our entire electoral process and the unjustified war that was waged against Iraq. It was really my way of letting off some steam, while at the same time calling attention to how we are being viewed, or dare I say judged, by the actions of our so called President. There are so many people who are and voted against him, yet we are all forced to wear the same badges of shame as those who are in support of him. The masses blindly flock behind this "Shepard" being foolishly mislead by his unfounded suspicions, which serve as the weakening agent in his supposedly "solid" foundation. It's almost as if he were single handedly trying to destroy us as a Nation and a people. We are looked upon by all as a greedy, selfish nation who is only concerned with selfish gains, and for the most part, it's sadly true. But that is the image of those in positions of political power and authority, not the common people, although we are the ones to pay the ultimate price. It makes one really wonder who the true terrorist are. They try to blind us even further with all these bullshit illusions about voting, and how by doing so, we can make a difference ... lol ... what's even sadder than that is the fact that so many people believe it, as if the previous election wasn't enough of a mockery. Things will never change. The state of the world will only continue to diminish. This is just the beginning ... of the end that is.
Peace
muah ... *D
you speak the truth Dae, really enjoyed that piece, thought your train of thought flowed real nice line to line. Peace,
[QUOTE=Dae Ja Nae]My being is bound by darkness on a quest to receive the light
explorations of exploitations attempt to blind my sight
divine rights reach new heights
an unfathomable flight
with an unknown destination
most will board without hesitation
laying down the crumbled foundation of a lost nation
every plan in which they’ve partaken
leads us closer to desecration
contemplations of consciousless pagans
leave the just to suffer the endless ramifications
the best of us now forced to wear badges of defamation
character assassination
the whole world now views us with the deepest sentiments of disgust
we want more, so we take more, an insatiable lust
no sense of trust, more like a well disguised terrorist
reeking havoc blacker than the plague, but most of us are oblivious
like these weapons of mass destruction, our "word" is non-existent
speaking with forked tongues- and trickery of magicians
Politicians ...
they bring division amongst the hearts and minds of men
beginning with our decision to allow these tyrants in
we can’t win
not when they have an infinite reach that knows no end
forever bathing, but yet uncleansed of their inexorable sins
betrayal of friends - outcaste - unable to make amends
inflicted wounds so slow to heal, those that do are reopened
my mind spins, dizziness sets in,
I falter on my feet
inner strength is now weak, inner voice unable to speak
I beseech thee to set us free
from your clutches of iniquity
for your acts of depravity will enslave us for an eternity
on my knees I begin to plead
the cries of a desperate daughter with a heart that bleeds
hoping all will heed
before it’s to late,
our fate sealed shut behind an unyielding gate .....
Peace
Some of you might recall this one ...
Dae this was beautiful Queen u get iller wit every drop u drop! Had to read this multiple times your'e so talented it's beyond imagination, loved the message, vocab, and tha flow was flawless. All praises due..
I think I've seen this one before. It's a good piece. One of the things that impresses me about your writing is that you can use bars of varying lengths, and still keep a steady flow. That's not easy to do.
This is a Good read i can see your a deep thinker, and aware of the madness going down.
Thank you both. I really appreciate.
Generations of technique combined with a God like flow
With a style so bold that I control the sacred scrolls
the tactics of Queen Nzingha, esteem like Nandi
heart of the Zulu Priestess with the presence of Tiye
I sew beautiful seeds that sprout flowers that’s deeply rooted
your weak style-diluted with concepts that’s so polluted
my words flourish, creating jewels the conscious will cherish
subliminal famine vanquished, proceed to feed the malnourished
this here’s mental nutrition, I blaze food for thought
amazed by the way transition frees the mind that’s been caught
fuck them mind tricks, my shit’s lucid-I surpass Jedi’s
swift with liquid swords, render your thoughts paralyzed
it’s the ...
Return of The Dragon snake spittin’ with Deadly Venoms
I’m strapped with The Golden Armsready to get up in em
I’m more ...
sort after than the sacred secrets of Egypt
perplexin' like hidden messages in solar eclipses
with no guns, I flow son, "The Chosen One"
I collect souls of Shoguns, The Assassin
Still, Priceless ...
The Modern Isis, it’s your girl Dae Ja
smooth with seductive ways that amaze and Per Suades ya
to seek a higher learning and quench the soul that is yearning
become one with the beating drum and fuel the fire that’s burning
evolve into something greater, magnify The Creator
The Savior, Mind Elevator, save the bullshit for later
Peace