Luther Large Lynguistics ( Official Thread )

thanx man.........uppin

uppin?

any!?

reminded me of heavy mental, even though it was sohrt, it was really cool, peace. 7.5/10

thanx man any1 else can feed?

i got ya back man! it was tight as fuck! stay up 8/10

Peace king...this reminds me of one of those pieces where you ask yourself..."and you say all that to say what???"....vocab was ill, but what's the message. Sometimes a clutter of words such as this can loose feeling and sound like you are just babbling at the mouth...no disrespect, because I know what you're doing...but, "a man gaines nor expresses his knowledge through fancy wordings and 'evasive' phrases...but simple gestures."~Not knocking this or anything...it was a nice read, but think about that next time...try to put more heart and tone down on the mind a bit....Wun, Peace.

....oh yea, almost forgot....6/10, solid. 1ne.

thanx white

and rae i know what you mean man.........but what i was expressing was livin life in the hood and i was kinda comparing it with war and politics..........nah mean

but thanx for the replies tho

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it was good, mang... i give ya 7... would be a better read if it was constructed line for line instead of in a paragraph, but dont think im hatin...

Definitely has the feel of heavy mental. I'd say very creative and abstract, but at times awkward, for example what is a re elected defendant? Also, I find that when cats throw too many rhymes close together it sounds a bit strained, and instead of the writer injecting the rhyme with intended and very specific meaning, the words may digress from that precise meaning. But having said that, you come from the heart, and that is art. That's my bit. Peace.

^^ thanx alot my man i really appreciate the feedback its just sumthin i wanted to do at the time


when i said "re elected defendant" what i meant was catchin a case twice

like i said i was kind of comparring it with polotics....

a defendant is the person being accused in court and the term re elected means to be back in office

so what i was talkin about in that line was..............................basically goin back to court for the second time as a defendant

.....i really do appreciate ya'll leavin feedback though thanks

I see what you're saying. Post some more on this threat, bro. Keep it coming.

i dunno dog.. nice vocabulary and all.... but "structuring" your words into actual verses is 'half the battle'... like GI Joe.. lol... u kno.. jus looks like random rambles....... i even tryed readin it to a beat and i just got lost.... i dunno if your writing to backround music.. but if not.. u should.. might help.. no offense to yu.. cuz i see alotta potential in what yu posted... but yu need to not jus ramble off... and start tryin to iron out ur message some...

nevertheless... you still managed to come with some interesting words so... roll with that.. develope it into something better

aite.. peace

its all about the skills