adedwutang's protected scrolls

aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

feeedddback please

somebody

feedback ppeeeppsss
hey wusup ya thought i come back and drop some knowledge on you old ass mother fuckers haha check it

Invisible Ink, the new alias of a general/
Natioanl Treasure my rhymes become federal/
no retinals, cant focus on the look of ma lines/
only pigment i contain is the blood in my eyes/
word of the wise, too hot cant throw dirt on the sun that i shine/
no cover no bullets your mine/
no time no money im crime/
pause, gimme a second its hard dam work to shit on this record/
lucky like a seven, get ya head blown off split like a melon/
come steppin/
im reppin every hood that be feelin ma message/
hard shit on this track im spittin wit method/
maybe ghost, or masta, im still killin you/
tax man u all paid up but im still billin u/
stick a ice pick in ya neck yes im chillin too/
sorry for the graphics but im just too visual/
gone for a min but a nigga got a legacy/
legendary skill not just a heisman but the treasury/
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aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

You lyrically got some shit off your chest with this one.
Kinda reminds me of "Hungry" by U-god but better.
I only have one beef, you need to fix your spelling.

haha good looks yo im actually really good wen it comes to grammar and all that but wen i write freestyles i put down watever but thanx for replyin son.
peace-

the last page of the scrolls homey the dynasty is over/
ima retire and come back harder like jay to tha hova/
invisible Ink write the name down and remember it/
take a mental note of ma skill cuz it only lead to ya betterment/
the delicate flow is so ancient that they just had to relic it/
relish it, sell a cig to a sick cuz im on that goodfella shit/
infectious like staff no vaccination for the lives that im takin/
chef master i bake bad mutha's so hot u cant touch this kid sucka/
fuck up ya ankles wen i break em like half-amazin at the rucker/
bring da ruckus cuz ya never herd somethin fuckin up ma structure/
i hail from the greatest ice storm New York is back mother fuckers/
i dont act son ima hustler wen it comes to fuckin up bustas/
Big L status smoke spliffs wit the baddest rather im badder then the illest/
spillin the knowledge stone cold im the chillest/
killer raps wit science im the devil version of a chemist/

cmon ma niggas

linez 8-12 had my head bobbin yo-

nice work

yea that was my favorite part too i tried to make a verse around it real quik but i dk cuz good looks tho
peace

check it
nuclear rhymes split apart ya particles cuz ma flow so marvelous/
part of his method is a criminal-esque molecular level arsenist/
ima son yo ass cuz this boy got too many bitches im mackin shit/
guess whos back in it, i bust yo head aint no way of reattachin it/
smack ya koofy off, strait up dunce a nigga like ima game show host/
parasitic insect cut up ya veins til i get to ya brain then i choke/
smokin motha fuckas bring a death fog as i approach/
cant escape the mist just sacrifice ya self for the roast/
lackin the inte

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Originally Posted by adedwutang

aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

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If you shortened a couple lines in the begining, this would be one kind of music i would listen to. You gotta a simple and upfront style of writing, and by the end of this verse i really got the points. Reminds me of a conscious devin the dude verse, without all the rhyme schemes he writes with. Out of all the bullshit on this site, this verse is stands apart from what i've read.
8/10.

thanx cuz i appreciate that, sometimes i get heated and i just wanna talk real shit so good looks on that. ill try n keep that up.
peace-

pass that shit and lemme show u the tru meaning of ya highness/
honor the best and those worthy of recognition from ya blindness/
loyalty is a rare quality reserved for only the realest of real persons/
jealousy and betrayal is what ultimately leads to all these black herses/
settle down and lemme flow freely wit my neverending knowledge/
these verses got continuous streaks like cars do with mileage/
i done wrecked niggas wit my mysteriously vengeful skills/
i vent for bills cuz my temper swallow mc's like pills/
wash em down wit the infamous and aquatic flow/
legendary for the rep now im hot cuz i kno/
the streets we walk, got mic chords lined out in chalk/
break bones wit talk, u can c ma skills from the roots to the stalk/
everybody get wit it, copyrwrite my shit but niggas still bit it/
bring my ego everywhere and the shit still never fit in/
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ohh man i love this verse lol

check it, you cant dissolve the flow this kid got til im finish/
your raps i diminish, attack the track big shit u cant miss it/
punk mother fuckers in the kitchen, washed up u cant dish it/
feelin ma disses convert ur ass from wack ass to Kristian/ (my name)
best of wishes to ya homey u gonna need the help/
step up to ya father and this bitch nigga gets the belt/
think u got me in the corner better revise ur thoughts/
i rise up from the lost chop the top off the boss/
killer instinct only comes out wen u the poorest/
lolipoppin this nigga flamin like a torch in the forest/
pour gasoline rhymes til i engulf ya whole family/
satanic raps the fire in my mind equivelant to insanity/
representing all of humanity i take out UFO's wit 16's kid im dangerous/
extraterrestrial aliens cant match my intelligence nah nigga/
they aint as fly as i get, i reach space wen my dj finish wit the set/
smack the visual out ya head cuz im moving on to the next/
nigga i can deepthroat bitches wit ma balls on her breast/