I try to write nd shit but i just cant get the hang of it. Any tips, ideas or help?
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I try to write nd shit but i just cant get the hang of it. Any tips, ideas or help?
Believe it or not, this isn't as bad as you think. Keep working on it and it'll get better. We all gotta start somewhere. As far as tips, what helps me is, saying it out loud, if it doesn't flow right all the way through, I change words until it's consistent. Just keep posting and see what people think.Quote:
Originally Posted by xXKhemikalXx
Edit: lol, If nobody kills you in the other thread, I'll happily do it after work :p.
Altight yea if you wanna kill me its ok.
youre real wack!!! ill end your keystyling career before it starts!!!
just stay the fuck out and watch my sword cut through anything your mind will construct!!!
watch me blow on the mic look a book shelf
you get on the mic and blow it like brooke shields
you like to thread beads in n out ya butt hole
your dead with a mud hole leakin out a puddle
youre a fat homo like rosie o donnel
eating whole packages of choclate double stack milanos
a fat fuck with a girl who looks like john goodman
forced to puke while givin her long looking
step off rookie!!!!
Did You make that up Thats a baby rap,
Its past your bedtime go take a nap,
You were an accident a mishap,
You say your angry but at who at?
God for makin you unloved and fat?
Did he make you look like a rat?
Ya annoyin like a gnat,
Get outta here before i hit you wit my bat,
Fuck it ill pull out my gat,
1 in the chest 2 in the head,
Bitch get up oh wait ya dead.
Khem:
You have good structure, but your rhymes were too basic. Fat, rat, gnat, bat. I feel you are on the right track, but just need to be more creative with your style. It will build over time, so do not get discouraged.
angry:
No structure. Nothing rhymed. I'll give you points for the Rosie O'Donnell insult, but other than that....
i'll do your rhyme the way i would have wrote it.
thats some baby rap, softer than baby crap
angry you cranky its time to take a nap,
ur a mishap, result of when a trojan snapped
u mad? maybe at God cuz u ugly and fat
a cracker with no cheese but he look like a rat
infested with fleas... flies.... maggots and gnats
getoutta dodge before i grab my bat, play barry bonds
have you home runnin when pull out my gat
click-clack, fuck yo legs and arms, i'm dome gunnin
u on yo back like a bitch at the prom or homecomin
see how i spiced it up with "inbetween rhymes" and extended metaphors.
if my rhyming word was "rap" i'll try to toss in a few more "-ap" words inbetween the end of the line.
also try to use alliteration, using words that start with the same letter in sequence. 2pac did this the best, listen to him.
extended metaphors - you did it when you said "baby rap/take a nap" but then stopped doing it.
rapping is a mixture of all these things and more.
be creative be original and you'll be good.
watch your fuckin mouth manga boy!!!!Quote:
Originally Posted by James Crow ESQ
Lol
i would make you quit rapping.Quote:
Originally Posted by angry!
if you want to go out like cobain, i'm not hard to find.
look in the mirror longer clown or drop a 16 on your homies!!!
after the reaction youll likely quit!!!
there aint a niche for a final fantasy spit cornball!!!!
^^Dude shut up.
you do the same!!!
you got no rhythm when you write you got a real cyborg element to your rappin!!!
id give you advice but itd go over your head!!!!
listen to these other corn balls!!!!
i never really understood why yall are posting some lyrics on the internet. i mean this is like only 30 percent of the job; if you wanna rap you have to be able to record or to perform the song and thats much harder than writing imo. especially at the begining i remember how hard it was for me to record a song because it sounded like shit. it took me several months to really feel comfortable with da mic and to impress people with my performance
real talk
^^bingo!!!
dropping rhymes here should be for practice!!!
a lot of yall never rocked a cipher in person!!!
notebook chumps!!!