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    Bend it like those tried to bend it like a right angle
    Ride the track with them 8-0-8 drum kits
    Mixed with thunderous symbols in e’m/
    Spit whips out cha chained mouths
    Get Dartmouth my outros be ending themes/
    Check ya dreams at the door rappers get scores
    Like those Hans Zimmer cinematic soundtracks/
    Stepping on moons, had to air walk what cha can’t talk
    Faded faux’s now you stalking ya prey/
    You ain’t the apex predator
    Your just an out dated specimen/
    Meditate on how to undress her
    Delicate, close quarter combat trained/
    Tactically tarnished armed varnish political
    Armed critical speak imperial with them accents/
    Traded fortress iced out minds torturous been a corpus cristae
    Resident iron out cha intelligence, been print maker slat taker /
    Photography major tone poser chose heat made in Dover
    Ain’t the crib, get cha rattled until the cage is unleashed/
    Write cha scripts in the last will you could
    Rite cha last testament to those who remain relevant/
    Transistor electric shock time out OPS
    Spit flames blood iced wisdom teeth at cha/
    Masked wrestler timed tester luchadore
    I’m ripper three-hundred and sixty five days a year
    Drink scotch, whisky and Bacardi I’m Yoga Flame Champ/

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    killa darts! sheepish at its purest form. keep it up

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    It was good but the flow was off imo i dont know if thats just how u structured it or wat but your imagery n vocab is good i just wasnt feeling the flow very much n usually the flow is 40% of the rhyme u can use simple words n if the flow is good it can b a masterpiece n on the other hand u can use all these complex words but if the flow isnt there it is satisfactory to read..maybe thats just me tho decent script overall
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    My skills punish, you untill ya grills rubbish, make ya cry like peeled onions More electrifying. Then a eels touch is, got a girl thats real luscious Eat these rappers for real like sealed lunches More bad ass than a navy seals gun is
    More fly then everybody that wields luggage
    Im the beer clutchin career crushin fear nothin fierce one with...sheers cuttin blood spills gushin no need to worry bout the wounds cuz u wont heal from it

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    appreciate the feedback, yall

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