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[sabinnchung]

the names my birth name, this is just a "keystyle"

when i fuck around i get stupid like fucking a hoe bag
your getting stabbed cuz your flows trash
my competition is no man
trying to get dough getting stupid grabbing monopoly peices
sniffing ether drinking codein obviously sleezy
hits out the bong eyes bloodshot from the drugs
in my brothers house where the cops can't bust
rolling a blunt with ease
while a cunts on my d
getting in casino games underage
without a fake id selling pinto like ranges murdering any age

i tried my best for my first ever verse

i know i suck, but i'm looking for advice, other then quit

[deadlymelody]

Keep working I guess.....One thing I see is you got too much shit in there, shorten it up to make it stronger

Like GZA said, Half short and twice strong.

[sabinnchung]

2nd verse, i did this fairly quick

its survival of the fittest in war
caniving suckers snitching in war
die eventually like cemo patients
your flow gets treated slow, pain stings
find out the truth, cease when your bleeding
try n maintain, booth mc's bled cause of teasing
stuck off my shit like flys on shit
when you talk i open my fly n piss
speak to the wrong grown man
with your simple words n clown your damned
why your still alive go wonder
on the mic stand i'm violent like thunder
think i'm dead cuz my names not Jesus
but your girl didn't say shit after my penis
penetrated like basketball hoops
eliminated your mic for asking for the truth
i rock weed and liquor daily
picking trees out my yard like candy
burying bodys in my garden's dirt
i never lie after the swords been at work
take a hostage like 9/11
your intestines like pasta dry n dead

this is just a keystyle should i praqctice writing?

[Lyrical Genius]

its like nothing rhymes

[Aclikyano]

its like nothing rhymes

yea homie...... dat shit simple as fucc......
gotta WORK ya SWORD a lil more son......

peace.

[sabinnchung]

hopefully i improved alittle, this is my practice

i'm not a crack addict but i still roll the blunts
i want this one and that one even the one that sucks
thats how greedy i come when its time to eat
crime lords names part of americas speech
look at 50 Cent nowadays rolling in hollywood
gracing the red carpet like Monroe used to ride wood
i got shoes for every outfit in my closet
was never in there cuz my dick, i always cocked it
i'm like pac-man in a battle, eating the competition
defeating the opposition, while looking hot in shit
see me in videos about beef but getting love
setting wannabes straight weaving thru setting shit cuz
i'm like chess peices in a game homie
i take all your property then reign supreme

[GuardianOne]

Since is just practice, you shall need to improve the way you express in rhymes. You're have to be care when using well known artists. I suppose you were busting.

Peace

PS:Continue to practice

[BlaK FuRYaN]

that wasn't too bad, i kina like it...

look forward for the next piece with a lil more content.

[sabinnchung]

drink the crown royal an ginger ale to hide the pain
but all that happens is me hiding who i slain
brief intermissions in this world cause misery
flaws are listed in the obituary fucking pausing history
have to represent for the state of connecticut
my state of mind is expressed in rage in my phonetics
you would think getting snuffed is enough
but you try n act all tough like a cunt
low suspicions are on the beat tonight
knifes the size of spears beats you at a suprise
sharpening the spear is hardening my fear
tap all laws doing painkillers fucking ordinance n peers
cuz life sucks i juss got to trife cunts
rep ct faithfully as i hold the pipe that you suck
physically fix those who oppose me
when i'm on the rampage i throw thee
carry everybody like Atlas motherfucker
hugging lovers but your bitch is uglier then a punk

more like 13 minutes

[sabinnchung]

who did this? i don't mind abouth this though

the world is mine for the taking as if i'm the apocalypse
i pawn the weak minds when i spark cuz i'm the catalyst
my rap calibers shotgun when i dump bodys behind the dump
try to get me to dickride when i don't fuck around with chumps
bring along your dr seus ryhmes homie i juss laugh at you
with the funky rythm i carry it forces you in a cast with ya crew
try n catch me off guard i got my back like holding my skeleton
excellence seeds my success and i'm higher then a pelican
the rides hooked up to wit 1000 watt speakers dude
i don't wanna bring your mom into it but i can't help being crude
each line you write like tai chi all set up with no punch
with the shit that i write take your ass as my food at a brunch
lay as puzzled as an immigrant coming to americas borders
i don't pimp but i made ya bitch my hourly whore
keeping confessions safe cuz my word is my bond
leaving my enemies with the muhfucking murky waters like a pond
i take any shape when i kill fatigues ect. like a virus dick
i know i'm the thorn in your side and i love being a prick

[MASTER PAI MEI]

I did your welcome.....read the must read sticky

[sabinnchung]

i'm the trash man, you the trash man
i rake in the cash man, you rake the ass man
go get your bro dude, you'll need ya bros tools
twenty to shoot, i got coke like substance dude
take off my brim, smoke in the silence
toke in the violence, holding the violin
you a joker getting no air waves
i'm the joker setting up bros fair n play
tropical color ice you can't try n match
try as you may i fight n shot
freaks screaming uncle you win
i smash my knuckles over ya eyelids
cash money, yea, thats what i count
cash daddy, thats the man you fucks you clown
busting an army, i proclaim i'm the king
might be true b, juss wait n see dick

[sabinnchung]

gotta go to school, 10 minutes

ayo, no disrespect but you kids straight trash
i rake you man like a couple of leaves then take ya cash
funny how i made em vex, then i make em x'd
you crossed out like i'm a.i. cuz i make em text
make em leave the spittin realm
i'm the best at it when i'm leavin em splittin like gems
i'm wearing your gems n jewels
cooler then a glacier, after i collect that candy i then proceed to fool
you n you then him n her like an undercover cop
like paul peirce used to say brother blood i'm not gonna stop
i ain't used to being hated on by a couple of fakers
cuz i drop all ya'll like a couple of splappers
you ain't from the rap world b
you from the place where crap swirls g
i'mma grind-ya like a meals
then find ya, hide ya corpse like a valentines day feeling
locked in chains shot in pain dropped in vein
thats ugly son like what you came out of, a jake

[sabinnchung]

this punk coming up like little kids testing-the-water
this emcee's dumber then president Bush investing-in-war
i'm known for rocking the lights on the suv
clown don't mAKE me laugh, you a pest n ya crews weak
ya best friends fucking ya girl at night
ya ego's juss been popped like before so fight
don't make me get ya crew to backstab you
test me n call out the gay jokes, i got the axe, van n the pool
before we're done i'll throw you in the pond with the fishes
first time you heard a pussy were wearing a tampon like a bitch
this a wake up call, but i put this bitch to sleep like hitten snooze on the radio
i'm drinkin booz while i smoke, then i hit up ya crew like i'm ya hoe
shake ya head looking at this, shook n jizz'n
you can stick me up like a thug, but what crook piss'n
i know your jerking off to this tonight
think you in a tight situation now, but i'll make sure the coffin even tighter
make the asian jokes, i dare you please
i know your dwarfed by all this action, i got this kid on my dick and i spared his knees
make you lick the waste off the floor like a world series sweep
punishment is stickin this fag wit a girl thats easy to get into like trees
i'm done and still drunk, dumb and still won
making out with the cash, you swung n still a bum

i'm trying to improve

SHOULD I WRITE? OR CONTINUE DOING WHAT I'M DOING WHICH IS GOING AS QUICK AS I CAN? all i know how to do is multis and i don't think i'm that good at it. DO I HAVE POTENTIAL?

[MASTER PAI MEI]

everyone has potential practice makes perfect!!!