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    One step from the edge on a ledge called life
    one step and be dead but I pledge more life
    a forced dive, into the darkest
    depths of the soul of a mouldy carcass
    artistically strained but bliss still remains
    no hits, just miss, my wrists feel the pain
    each vein breached, stained and caused puddles
    to keep sane I sleep chained with jaw muzzled
    puzzled, by the thoughts in my head
    fought till I bled, probably ought to be dead
    no more than a thread, holding me together
    my shawl's been shed, now I'm cold in any weather
    better days are only in my past
    please let me play cos it's lonely in my mask
    show me to my casket, no eggs in this basket
    please be my legs, I won't beg but I'll ask it
    you bastard, you mastered living well
    fast to judge, but I never asked to live in hell
    tell me your secrets, I'll tell you my regrets
    while you're cashing each cheque, I'm trapped in deep debt
    keep getting closer to the edge
    hopelessly beg for a dose or two of meds
    through the thread that holds my life together
    a knife cuts and my life flutters like a feather

    One step from the edge on a ledge called death
    one step, resurrect, as I beg for breath
    the effort exerted, the stress and the hurt it-
    left me to question myself, is it worth it?
    it's perfect, the tranquility of death
    it's worthless, and still it beats what's left
    left of the restless, mortal existence
    I left as I entered the portal, the kingdom
    I bring glum news to those who are teetering
    close to the edge, cos your death won't achieve a thing
    won't even bring a complete resolution
    like staying inside so you'll breathe less pollution
    be best to loosen up and live your life
    and let peace be and function with the strife
    punctured with a knife is the vision you percieved
    at this junction in your life make the decision to believe
    once you've risen you'll achieve more than you ever dreamed
    won't even need to devise a clever scheme
    never be the one who took that step
    worse yet the one hung by the hook that kept -
    him close to the edge, never over the ledge
    dangling with dread hanging over his head
    no hope as he bled, he could feel fear, it stalled him
    the rope turned to thread, you can still hear him falling.
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    Felt this whole thing is done imo smooth read good imagery vocab was there.

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    each vein breached, stained and caused puddles
    to keep sane I sleep chained with jaw muzzled
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    Im the beer clutchin career crushin fear nothin fierce one with...sheers cuttin blood spills gushin no need to worry bout the wounds cuz u wont heal from it

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    Cheers home. Thanks for the comments.

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    Nice reminds me of some killah priest I suppose you were busting.



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    Hell razah

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mantra View Post
    I suppose you were busting.
    Haha, mega lolz. Classic line. I actually used that line in a verse recently, lolz.

    Thanks for peeping, G.

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