Ronins Revenge ( Official Thread )

[noel411]

I think you showed me the first half of this before? Really nice shit, both verses. Aside from about 2-3 bars, it didn't fall off at all. Nice piece.

[Life-Giving-Sword]

flowed nice...rhymes tight

[TUCO]

Its quite an interesting verse. Although some parts seemed to lose the flow but you captured it well again.

Peace
PS: Keep posting

no homo

[Ronin]

peace, thanks

i know its patchy in some bars

rofl at the tcm animation

[002]

ive killed so many rhymes its beyond funny

lovely line... the way i see it...

i sit in silence, and meditate with eyes closed
and imagine violence, when our lifestyles de-throned

i just might commit seppakku to lie horizontaly

ONE

[Ronin]

thanks bro

[Ronin]

in the nuclear dawn when the skies are torn
a new hatred was born from man to slay all
when civil liberty falls, our minds will mourn
cus the devils scorn crushes immaculate thought
a world of pawns, herded by sheppards
with demononic calls projected in a message
a war fought, middle eastern land was severred
our impestilence pays reverence forever
and political relevance means nothing
when the machine payrolls its own mal-function
our bias contorts war faught in news reports
marine corps slain in vain by rebel force
my sword is forged from the souls of the wicked
applaud the hoard force and your fueling the gimmick
the sinner kneels timid, asking god for forgiveness
but he desserted when arm construction was finished
mans limit reached, when the streets errupt
politics is like music, the scenes corrupt
facists for love, war crimes dont deduct
econamy crash and an asylum flood
born of bad blood the younger brothers building
haunted in the jux and taken for the pilgrims
exposing the corrosion, land mass left tainted
crimson tides break a maps grass scarlet painted

feedback appreciated, peace

[BlaK FuRYaN]

in the nuclear dawn when the skies are torn
a new hatred was born from man to slay all
when civil liberty falls, our minds will mourn
cus the devils scorn crushes immaculate thought
a world of pawns, herded by sheppards
with demononic calls projected in a message
a war fought, middle eastern land was severred
our impestilence pays reverence forever
and political relevance means nothing
when the machine payrolls its own mal-function
our bias contorts war faught in news reports
marine corps slain in vain by rebel force
my sword is forged from the souls of the wicked
applaud the hoard force and your fueling the gimmick
the sinner kneels timid, asking god for forgiveness
but he desserted when arm construction was finished
mans limit reached, when the streets errupt
politics is like music, the scenes corrupt
facists for love, war crimes dont deduct
econamy crash and an asylum flood
born of bad blood the younger brothers building
haunted in the jux and taken for the pilgrims
exposing the corrosion, land mass left tainted
crimson tides break a maps grass scarlet painted

feedback appreciated, peace

i had to quote the whole nine cause i felt this skript had allot of releveance to our current affairs....
I felt this was crafted nice to give a brief insight into certain running the bemused ppl are unaware of of....

Thanx

[jjh_38]

yea.. i couldn't really find one particular line to quote either... not that that's a bad thing... every line jus kinda hads its place... i liked how your rhyme scheme read... the internals really tied it together and the entire verse had a nice movement to it... read well.. not crazy ass bullshit flow.. but still somewhat unpredictable, u kno... i thought it was pretty good overall.. keep em comin.... peace

[K.E.G.]

inspired by your threads

I repent but I dred the day that commeth overtop the sky the returning rocks plummit
Drummer boy stuttered i have no gift to bring
Just the ending i march to offer back the constant kingdom
Holding the globe and I'm down with double u i predict sequel to W two
So now I gotta drum rhythms while running
A talent only for incredible crews
making front page of the news Nubian rebels against a majority of Jews
As home turf battles blew off the brothers were louting the booze.
George Walker Bush accused but he got away clean passed
Acme shrapnol going off like Looney Toons
On the wake of something exsplosive all rise to the end of you.
Get blind during World War 3 leave nothing left like Einstein concieved
And step over sticks and stones and piles of bloody bones the global end of you and me.

[Ronin]

thanks man

hopefully ill have more soon

[Dae Ja Nae]

in the nuclear dawn when the skies are torn
a new hatred was born from man to slay all
when civil liberty falls, our minds will mourn
cus the devils scorn crushes immaculate thought
a world of pawns, herded by sheppards
with demononic calls projected in a message
a war fought, middle eastern land was severred
our impestilence pays reverence forever
and political relevance means nothing
when the machine payrolls its own mal-function
our bias contorts war faught in news reports
marine corps slain in vain by rebel force
my sword is forged from the souls of the wicked
applaud the hoard force and your fueling the gimmick
the sinner kneels timid, asking god for forgiveness
but he desserted when arm construction was finished
mans limit reached, when the streets errupt
politics is like music, the scenes corrupt
facists for love, war crimes dont deduct
econamy crash and an asylum flood
born of bad blood the younger brothers building
haunted in the jux and taken for the pilgrims
exposing the corrosion, land mass left tainted
crimson tides break a maps grass scarlet painted

feedback appreciated, peace

Ronin, everything you write is always so on point lyrically. You seem to pull out the stops every time. This whole piece was a powerful display of imagery, but the highlighted lines actually made my hair stand on end. I love to read words that are influenced by real life issues, and you always manage to satisfy the reader in me by doing just that.

This really hit home ...

Peace

[Ronin]

thanks alot for the feedback jae

[Nexodus the Nth Entity]

a world of pawns, herded by sheppards
with demononic calls projected in a message
....
our bias contorts war faught in news reports
marine corps slain in vain by rebel force
my sword is forged from the souls of the wicked
applaud the hoard force and your fueling the gimmick
the sinner kneels timid, asking god for forgiveness
but he desserted when arm construction was finished
mans limit reached, when the streets errupt
politics is like music, the scenes corrupt
facists for love, war crimes dont deduct
econamy crash and an asylum flood

both parts stood out to me...
obviously the latter more so, it just felt seemless and did a nice job as such....the simple analogy to politics and music was solid...as was the comment about the soliders slain in vain....kept the references current and general so all can relate, making it a nice piece for all to relish...

exposing the corrosion, land mass left tainted
crimson tides break a maps grass scarlet painted

nice finisher, the image is what counts....can't deny that

keep it relevant
-- Nth --

[noel411]

Although it is a pity that you've been born into a environment of pale, pasty faced devils, I really do enjoy your writing a lot. Your shit always flows so smooth. The whole structure, and rhyme schemes and all always seem to fit so well together. Plus you always have a worthwile message. Such a shame you've been cursed with that god awful accent, because your verses would convert so smoothly to audio.