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Rock D's Verses :
fuck it i'll spit first, with mega hertz shockin how i burst yo buble
ya some ex Tight Ends now widericiver love to be in a huddle
(Half-decent opener. This could've been worded better.)
two faggot niggas that cuttle with a concept of suckin off large
luther yo rhyme is old style like elda barge
(Half-decent here, again. Same play of the name. Put it's a played concept" Your guys are fags and suck dick." You can get more creative.)
plus concept is flawed and there is no way he's god
two dumb fucks and a guy thats a faussade
(Decent punch here here. Some 'okay' play on tha name.)
luther be scared cause yo ass cant flow
you like old roots in the desert, yo ass in rhyme wont grow
(Half-decent punch here. Some creativity with the 2nd line though.)
oh no Rock killin 'em softly these niggas' wack
ya Rhyme is mui suave pequeno translation: to weak and compact
(This bar is whack. I'm takin' Spanish right now. And you just said their rhymes are "smooth and small". Learn some spanish if you're going to incorporate it into a bar.)
on contact i'll blast yo ass from here to hiroshima
i'll knock yo "block" off, in spanish esquina
(End-rhyme wasn't good here. Half-decent punch at best.)
lame fucks ya cant shadow box me
i blast blow with deadly fire and hiv
(....Some braggin'. And this didn't really hit at your opponent.)
im the soul general i cut off yo genetals, o u have vaginas
two fake heteros i'm beat ya pussies to ya look like aunt jamaima
(Decent punch at best here.)
my flow blinds ya wait till ya kingdom comes
i'll make sure ya'll get there, cause when i blast ya stomach it wont be fixed wit tums
(2nd line was pretty good. 1st bar was whack. You can come harder.)
blood out ya gums and it aint gengavitis hitin
is me checkin these fags aka kittin's
(1st line could've been worded better for a NICE punch. You messed it up with 2nd line though. Doesn't really make sense.)
put up ya mittins cause ya already drop ya gloves
this niggas dont want war they want love
(Wasn't feeling this bar.)
oh lord look down below a half mc and a blasphemer
scared to even jump gun no demeanor
(Wasn't feeling this either.)
I wont sugar coat this ass whopin the concept is set in stone
ya'll is don This when this post is set is done
(In truth, stone and done don't really rhyme. They may be spelled the same, but they're pronounced differently. Your verse is falling apart Rock.)
Fuck them bitches, leaches, stop playin with eachother breaches
Lets see how large ya’ll concept reaches
(1st line could've been worded better, lotsa fillers. 2nd line was good. Decent punch here.)
When ta neck twitches from getting stomped to concrete
When I cut of ya tounge and ya cant compeat
(Half-decent punch here.)
I blast heat ya deceit some leet internet geeks
Get whooped like this an iniciation of banned greeks
(It's kind of stupid whenever you're on the internet callin' someone else on the internet a "geek". Maybe that's just me? This wasn't a good closer.)
D stans For dick nigga thats played out
yo flow will be like yo concept, and fade out
(Good opener. You're steppin' it up.)
like pussy you get flushed out just dont blush
i'm gettin started with shots of adrenalin rush
(Bragging here, kind of a weak bar. Half-decent here.)
nigga hush ya rhymes as weak so is yo technique
stick to wat u do best drop on ya knees and suck dick
(End-rhyme sucked here. Some multis. Half-decent punch.)
two closet freaks internet leet luther and concept
stick to viedo games and star trek
(2nd line kind of messed the flow up for me. Decent punch though.)
on this mic check i'll blast ya like boom baby's
nigga's beat me they be swallowin shrooms lately
(....This didn't really hit hard. Half-decent punch.)
i dont even gota blast ya ass u done killed ya self with that lame rhyme
i figured u cant concentrate when fuckin luther at the same time
(Half-decent punch here.)
nigga on this flow iget mines and when can even get busy on a mic
cause yo flow cant even be seen with 600 wts n flash light on daylight
(1st line was bragging. 2nd line was "okay". Decent punch here.)
so get right luther yo butt must not be tight u cant even stand up right
scince u been riddin concepts dick like a danm bike
(Okay 1st line I was thinkin' HOMO. However, readin' the 2nd fixed it up. But you been talking about them ridin' each others' dicks so much it's gettin' old and played out. Bad bar.)
niggas take hike u danm right RockD is solid and eternal
now who is RIP in this week's mourge jurnals?
(Braggin', not really hitting your opponent with 1st. 2nd line didn't hit hard either. Half-decent bar at best.)
soft mc's 2000+ post combined and ya still aint learned
that i'm Rock under me ya non but worms
(Creative with the names here. Good punch. You're steppin' up.)
ya herbs aitn even worth abusing
and look at the post above they all incinuate ya loosin
(Half-decent punch here.)
aint this shit amusing dat i dont even punchline i punch truth
we eatin this niggas like they were baberuth's
(Bad bar. 1st line bragging, and 2nd wasn't hitting hard.)
now how u like Rock Dick in yo mouth
u got lock jaw nigga now u dont know what the fuck to tlk about.
(1st line = HOMO. And this was a bad closer.)
Luther Large's Verses :
Yo you wanna battle me you'll have a fatal collision
just ask creepy's bitch ass he knows i aim with precision
(Good opener. Attempt at a personal?)
aint got a penny to ya name once your brain is incisioned
left in indigence, stabbed with a pencil lead'ell spread thru ya system
(Half-rhyme on tha end here. And it wasn't hitting that hard. Half-decent punch.)
lesson of wisdom for ya ass to fix that short circuit
your verse sucks i could give 2 shits.....if i thot it was worth it
(Decent punch here.)
fuck ya'll faggots follow my actions son D'll get Rocked
i already beat creepy but he procedes on my cock
(Decent punch here. Dick concepts are gettin old.)
your steez'ell get dropped like ya'll did as sum infants(This really didn't belong here. Didn't end-rhyme with anything else here.)
to sum it up in an instant rock ur parnter will fail you
swords'll impail you pull out a hammer from the holster and nail you
(Nice use of multis. Good punch.)
creepy thinks he's ill but he'll get seriously sizzled
plus I got the right tools so Rock(D) is easily chizzled
(Nice play of the name. Good punch here.)
kid your scheme is too simple u aint poppin shit not even pimples
(Meant to rhyme with line above? If so, it was a half-rhyme end rhyme. But some nice wordplay. Half-decent here.)
we keep it real and carry mad arms bustin off strong shots
go ahead and shoot but i'm the target so thats considered a longshot
(....This didn't really hit hard. Half-decent punch here.)
drop a bomb on the t.dot just to "blow up ya spot" flee from ya blocks,
D ya game is weak son ya name should be "sheet Rock"
(Good play on the name. Good punch here.)
L'll squeeze glocks or manipulate the game with his pen
diabolical fiends watch as i'm granulatin ya brain and it's stem
(Wasn't really hitting hard here. Half-decent punch.)
aim with a 10 creepy watch me kill ya sentinels verse
and rock, if u wanna cut off my genitals get off my dick first
(This was worded nicely, but. More dick concepts, and feedin' flippin' kinda brought it down. Decent closer.)
I'ma tinman? son keep watchin your wizard of oz/
fuckin faggot aint just blowin farts cuz hes still on my balls/
(Not a good opener. End-rhyme wasn't good here.Bad bar)
talkin tuff thinkin he's ill but FOLLOWS ryhmes like a kid/
claimin he'd pop me but he aint lickin shots if he swallowed my jizz/
(Nice wordplay. Good punch here.)
fake thug whos frontin hard swearin he lives in the slums/
if thats true why does he catch feelins when i diss where hes from/
(Nice personal here too. Good punch.)
I have u fearin me punk u aint the best i murder u faithfully/
hes right he leaves dice shook cuz he cant shake me/
(End-rhyme kinda sucked here. Nice wordplay. Half-decent punch.)
u shouldve saved it chief now imma see that you learn quick/
plus i wont acknowledge rock's verse cuz it aint worth shit/
(Good punch here.)
b4 you wanna make up lies remember i know where you at/
LL slang lines so dope that you'd think they were crack/
(This didn't hit hard. 2nd line was bragging. Bad bar.)
smacked in the dome son im prone 2 teach u a lesson g/
i know my shit is hott but pleez ya'll gotta stop sweatin me/
(Half-decent punch here.)
creepy's a homo, and dont say that he is not/
just look at what he wrote "I procede on your cock"/
(Good punch here.)
Yo i neva swing that way unless i'm holdin a hammer/
and i still put a strangle hold on your 3rd grade grammar/
(Decent punch here.)
I dont give a flyin fuck what ya steez or ya mans about/
I got Toronto on lock so the inbreeds cant get out/
(Decent punch here, liked 2nd line.)
fuckin liar str8 up yo go get ya morals checked/
creepy wants to blow my brains out but i hate oral sex/
(More dick concepts here. Be more creative. Decent closer.)
Creepy Follow's Verse :
hey yo L you a loudmouth, a tinman with no heart/
I blow farts that sound sicker than your verses kid so don't start/
(LMAO @ 2nd line. Good opener.)
when the chrome sparks, LL they'll have to bandage your head/
this dude challenged me and bitched up, he abandoned the thread/
(Good punch here.)
Luther you couldn't hang if your neck was all in a noose/
before this battle, your homie GC was callin' a truce/
(It would be better if you could prove the 2nd line. Half-decent here.)
polish my boots, cocksucka bow and kneel to your master/
I kicked your ass so many times I left my heel with a fracture/
(Good punch here.)
is anybody feelin' this actor?, L you play the role nice/
perpetrating crook but kid you're shook like when I roll dice/
(Good punch here.)
Creepy's the dishonourable abominable type/
murder your partner, now you're losing all Concept of life/
(Bragging first line, not too good of wordplay on the name. Half-decent at best.)
I constantly strike, watch me aim and pop this rookie/
keepin' it real with mad arms?....let's call you Octopussy/
(Good punch here.)
check the stats, T.O., the first projects built/
Concept you said you're from Toronto please get off the dills/
(End-rhyme kinda sucked here. Half-decent at best here.)
RockD summed it up, L you internet geek/
my punchlines'll fly your fuckin' head into next week/
(Blah, half-decent at best here.)
so quit saying you won the battle and I precede on your cock/
pussy you'll get shot, I'll leave this twot bleedin' in shock/
(Homo, flamboyency at its finest. Bad bar, you practically dissed yourself here.)
believe it or not, just like Ripley's/
quit battling and find a career in blowjobs 'cause y'all suck like hickies!
(Decent closer.)
yo, this dude hates oral sex but sucks dicks for treats/
ya building frequent flyer miles from all those trips to Greece?/
(Half-decent opener at best. Maybe I'm not getting the 2nd line?)
see I'm homophobic, I ain't got love for a faggot/
snub or the matic, y'all can both catch a slug to the attic/
(Half-decent at best bar. You dont like faggots, okay? Could've been worded better.)
swallowing giz?, Creepy Follows'll make your mommy deeply swallow/
sniffin' rails from my shlong until she leaves with bleedy nostrils/
(...Okay. You're dissing their moms, not them. While it's a way to try and get at them, it's not good. Half-decent at best bar.)
you'll get ripped apart when I spit darts in a cypher/
ya claim to spit flames?, y'all couldn't give spark to a lighter/
(Wordplay nice here. Decent punch.)
I'll rape your ugly bitch and leave my seed stuck up insider her/
like Sigfried and Roy, these 2 fags be trying to fuck with a tiger/
(Had to fix structuve a MINISCULE amount. Played concept with "I fucked your girl". Creative 2nd line though. Decent punch here.)
Concept be calling me weird, but I'll tell you what's weird/
you suckin' L's dick and tickling his balls with your beard/
(....More dick concept. OLD. And didn't really hit hard here. Bad bar.)
'cause y'all are some queers, givin' brains making 'Bud wiser'/
ya make sucking dick sound the same as polishin' beers/
(End-rhyme sucked here. However, quite creative. Decent punch.)
and I don't catch feelings son, I just rep where I'm from/
Luther's really from Hollywood and never stepped in a slum/
(1st line = bragging. Feedin' and flippin' bring this down. Just an opinion thing though. Half-decent punch here.)
plus I'll hang Concept from his tongue, until he's sun-dried/
collyflower twots, I'll leave these pussies with funghi/
(Good punch here.)
so come try, scaredy-cat ya know where I'm at/
I'll e-mail you my fuckin' address and even send you a map/
(This didn't hit hard. Half-decent bar at best.)
when I was in grade 3 kid I was stuck in the streets/
you had milk and cookies by the dresser, tucked in your sheets/
(1st line = bragging. Pretty good 2nd line. Half-decent punch.)
with a tickle-me Elmo doll and a pair of Carebears jammies/
but Luther's fully grown now and only wears teared panties/
(Good closer.)
God Concept's Verses :
in this battle juss call concept jeff dahlmer god dammit
cause after i killem imma eat these two faggots
(Not a good end-rhyme. Punch wasn't hittin' hard either. Half-decent opener at best.)
plus i no im their rap hero
and after the funeral imma tag CONCEPT on theyre R.I.P muerals
(Another not so good end-rhyme. Half-decent at best punch.)
creepy thinks hes a weirdo?? but i dont know
maybe if weird means you fuck ya partner in the ass wit a strap-on dildo
(Half-decent punch here.)
and what about rock d....
well i no his whole styles sloppy and even if he was a bartender he couldnt top me
(Good wordplay here. Good punch.)
and yo does the D after ya name stand for DICK??
cause it kinda makes sence since ya whole styles bitch
(Decent punch here. Wordplay on tha name.)
followin around creepy n shit dressed in a gimp mask with a whip
on all fours lickin his split
(2nd line needed to be extended, and worded better. Decent punch here.)
now thats the shit......and i gotta laugh at ya man creepy follows
cause imma take this snakes head like that nigga in sleepy hollow
the kid cant spit so rock does he swallow???
(NICE play of the name. Good punch here.)
i no he talks TRASH but thats juss cause his whole style is GARBAGE
wit rhymes sloppier then the dyslexic graffitti artist
(....Could've worded 2nd line better. Good punch nonetheless.)
dam ya boi concept feelin like a crack head the way i smoked rock
and made creepys vision of winning fall apart
(Bad end-rhyme. Bragging. Bad bar.)
god dam son im waaaay to nice
you two thinkin you like some supermen on the mic???
well juss remember luthers packin fat sacks of kryptonite
(Good play of names here. Kryptonite/Superman though is kind of played out. And the bragging. But it seems to fall in place. 'Lex Luthor', etc etc. Good closer.)
when my rhymes hatch these kids be walking on eggshells
beat them with the toast untill they lose all brain cells
(Decent opener here. Some creativity.)
got rock d slurring his words like rocky from the head swells
pimpin creepy on Rexdale for prostitution and sex sales
(Good punch here.)
ahhh well.. the truth fuckin hurts
and how you gonna be an mc in a tube top and skirt?
(Should've came up with a better 1st line. 2nd line was good though. Decent punch.)
and how you gonna be fresh when i beat you into the dirt
these two faggots pictures be in the dictionary under the definition of MURKED
(Decent punch here.)
i pray that they hurt..cause i hate these two bastards
(This didn't end-rhyme with anything. Doesn't really belong.)
and when im finished withem they gotta be shoveled into a casket
theres noway they can eat me like these homos was fastin
poppin pills in they lids like cyanide asprin
(Good punch here.)
im pullin ya CARDS so you fuckers should be hittin the DECK
and if it was an s.t.d you couldnt catch wrekk
(Good punch here.)
face it you herbs the fuckin games over
your the weakest LINK and imma CHAIN smoker
(Played 1st line. Creative 2nd line. Good punch here.)
watch me re-arange all ya facial features
i remain UN-DIE FEATED like HAINES makes my fuckin SNEAKERS
(Another played 1st line. Decent punch here.)
and i hope you two know ya'll never get a deal
cause ya styles so boring the dj would fall asleep at the wheels
foreel
(Half-decent punch here.)
ya fuckin amatuer raps get stabbed witha dagga like abra-cadabra
now ya juss a stinky cadavore
you two aint no rappers
(Fixed structure a little bit. Bad bar here. Wasn't really hittin' hard.)
ya best to go back and practice then reply
ill bend you over backwards juss so you can kiss ya ass good-bye
(Kinda homo here. Decent closer.)
Overall, this was a good battle.
Rock D's Verse : You used the dick concept too much. They're on my dick, they're on their own dick, they're on each other's dicks. It gets old. Mediocre verse.
Luther : Good verse overall. Some played concepts. But you were consistent with the punches.
Creepy : You truthfully put it out there better then everyone. However, you were throwin' more punches at Luther then at Concept. This is a team battle, get at BOTH of your opponents. There weren't many flaws in your verse.
God : Look at Luther.
Vote - God & Luther.
Why? --
You can't depend on just one person to win the WHOLE battle for you. Creepy was spittin' hot man. But he spit more at Luther then Luther and Concept as a team. I saw more creative punches from Concept and Luther directeds towards both opponent's. Luther and God's punches were more consistent and constantly aimed at their opponent's. Rock D, you were consistent overall, but your just played out too many concepts. It got real old and borring reading through your verse. So for overall consistency, creativity I'm throwing my vote to God & Luther.
Great battle y'all.
Stay up.
This was a CLASSIC.
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