Nasty Nak's Thred

[Da Dishonourable Don]

where's da rhymes at V?

[VernakuLa]

Haha, all these post an buzz still aint posted shit as far as rhymes he need to hang it up and call it a day an quit for the last time.

ur a bitch

and the rhymes are coming soon be patient my babies

[VernakuLa]

a work in progress... from a collab wit White n dangerous about life

As my life cycles, rhymes at a whirling peak
Passed by high trials, times were I couldn’t speak
I stare vague at old photos, pounding heart, I scream inside
The snare plays to mold vocals, resounding charge, I free a sigh
I sculpted my face to my own liking, herbs can’t talk shit
Foldin pages I feel enlightened, words, rants in chopped print
I was birthed in to a dungeon; I don’t feel right in this scene
Where the perves go clubbin’, Why won’t I survive in this dream?


again a work in progress ill hit this up tommorow

[VernakuLa]

no fizzle?

[jallainINS]

As my life cycles, rhymes at a whirling peak
Passed by high trials, times were I couldn’t speak

this is an okay opener, could be improved

I stare vague at old photos, pounding heart, I scream inside
The snare plays to mold vocals, resounding charge, I free a sigh

this is the best bar of it clearly. definately layed it down here

I sculpted my face to my own liking, herbs can’t talk shit
Foldin pages I feel enlightened, words, rants in chopped print

solid, not as good as the two before it, but definately nice

I was birthed in to a dungeon; I don’t feel right in this scene
Where the perves go clubbin’, Why won’t I survive in this dream?



decent closer, if this is the closer. could be stronger, but it doesnt take anything away from the rap. obviously this verse is longer so im lookin forward to seein/hearin the full version.