WINNER---->Dusk Vs. Eric Unseen (BATTLE COMP SEMI FINAL)

[oDoUoSoKo]

and it aint dickriding since vern and ddd are in a set wit eric, its all real talk..peace un
vote

[Robert]

Round 1
Dusk-
from what ive SEEN, this fiend eric is *cough* a stiff
but ill actually "THROW YOU IN A SEMI" (truck) and drive u off a cliff
(ok opener, clever wordplay)

man i oughta spit a verse or two to further ur personal anguish
i herd that ur hangin wit vern in a "vertical sandwich"
(second line is an alright....)

preferebly pantless? i murdered this faggot long ago
when i first joined and spit a verse durin his battle wit radio
(ok personal......)

after he tried to play me though he got tight and told me to leave,
but fallin off lyrically and bouncin's a goal we kno hes achieved
(keeping it personal and some decent wordplay sofar)

i wasnt kiddin in that pm, when i told u, u had turned to turd
wit as many V as the dm (dmv, 1 v) and audio only vern has heard
(lol, this hits but maybe you should explain about the pm stuff)

member that comp. u tired to lead that was merely spare chit chat?
u couldnt TURN-A-MINT (tournament) if u were bitten by a WERE TIC-TAC
(wordplay seems a little off here ("by a were tic tac") but the personal about the first comp is solid)

so get back as rhymes are tossed and talk from pussys quiets down
cuz kickin me off a thread back in the day was cool..but try it now
(decent lines....)

i like it how i threw u in oj for nothin more than pitty
since ur flow i couldnt locate, like whores with 4 inch titties
(lol, nice aggressive lines, had me laughing...)

in foreign cities, war'in wit me leads to loss of a permanent tooth
couldnt "MAKE THE FINALS" if u ran this tournament to
(LOL!!!!!!, heavy hitter)

burnin the truth in ya brain, fuckin 2 mirrors aint a 3 sum
and since ur unheard like ur unseen....i might as well be dumb!
(decent closer, overall a pretty impressive opening verse)

Eric-
Like Cheech I'm auctioning off pussies from Dusk to Dawn
I'm a killer in this battlefield whether it'd be King or Pawn
(nice opener...)

You's all gone when the mentals get focused,
swarm on you like conrnfields & locust
You's hocus pocus like a fake magician,
the loc'est send your phony ass to a mortician
(some ok lines but this is kinda filler for me...not really hitting)

Beat into submission, enjoy this sleeper hold,
when the cards are on the table alotta fools fold
Fools gold thinkin you were comin on top, this is a comp,
not the pop shot in u and ur moms porno flop
(the first three lines in this bit are average,the last is decent)

You can't be from the home of hip-hop,
he's really from montana choosin between boots and flip-flops
(lol, nice, first good punch, def hits....)

Blood clot everwhere you are the flow stops,
crowds gett to runnin like a crackhouse and cops
(decent lines....)

You couldn't drop if you was a cumlious cloud,
dark grey and crackin thunder real loud
Disappointed those in a drought prayin for a storm,
when I reign supreme the joy is uniform
(ok lines....i think your main problem sofar is not the wordplay but the lack of heavy hitting punches.......)

I don't conform to these norms of what it means to battle
I'll dead your beef like these Texas ranchers do to cattle
(nice closing lines.....)

First round goes to Dusk....he was hitting harder wit the punches while Eric had more filler in that verse then the whole rest of his comp verses sofar imo....lets see what the second round brings....

Round 2
Eric-
Go Ask Keidus,Since a fetus, My thoughts been RedHot'
And if change your sig now,then we got a bitch in da spot
(Dope! very aggressive opener, i like it)

You better be a real man & accept this confrontation
Your worshippers can watch they idols' desecration
(alright lines, i assume this is a reference to O.B, B.O.M, Vern all those cats)

They gettin knowledge like college, True wisdom resides in the Unseen
This cat thirst for power, like death valley & a empty canteen
(decent lines....)

Ignorant basis is a death stroke before you reach the oasis
You scoff at the name but it's you that remain faceless
(lol at the second line....hits, good stuff)

Lyrical pimptastic,smacking bitches back to they places
Out on the chopping block, where the paper chase is
(wordplay is good, punch not hitting hard....)

Best believe this, Dusk is out to get my money
Got the nick' for selling honey after it stopped being sunny
(alright....)

And if the stack ain't stacked, then its a knife in his tummy
You rep like crash dummies,brickwall finale for you sonny
(good wordplay, nice aggressive lines......)

You got a rookies imagination, spittin worthless w/ no purpose
I swim with porpoise, while you only perceive the surface
(like this lil' section, clever wordplay, the punch hits....)

I'm not trying to kick you out ,dousing you w/ flames to hear you shout
You can run out by ya whole damn self,
Retiring ya tired styles collectin Dus(k)t on a shelf
(decent...)

YOU takin pitty? Bitch pleeeze I'm the King of the Committee
You'll spend ya whole life praying you could rhyme this gritty
(decent closer...)

Dusk-
due to defeat, the grewsome heat will change ur pigment to a darker state
view me as weak, and in an instance face a martyrs fate
(average opener....)

ur hard as plates paper textured, i SEE the lesser of both us
and trying to rape the expert gets you terror from the lo-tus
(nice lines....)

whenever u quote dusk, u choke up due to rhyme intensity
to get them votes up, get ur throat fucked, cant find ur memory
(alright....maybe not hitting that hard)

im fine with weaponary, 20 lines get reclined, shredded and stabbed
eric is fab til Zed is deadin leavin lead in his abs
bet its a hab-it for u to rap wit less than little skill
guess whos droppin it in and u, cold shoulder leaves ya nipples still
(hmmmm...the wordplay is pretty good but the punches aint there....filler)

kept the personals to a minimal (minimul) to please saddle blazers
instead to battle send lyrics that'll razor cattle grazors
(nice lines...)

that ol age is kickin in harder than narcs in crack condos
im dusk, cant beat me in the dark like black bongos
(LOL! very nice lines, clever wordplay and hitting, had me laughing)

kind of like they unseen, lunchin on ur bait style
got beef like pun's dreams, cummin out ur fake child
(alright....)

brakes smiles shit on grins, and demember teeth exposin
confirm ur gender, u gettin burned wit ur placenta beaten open
(decent lines....)

ud never beet potent if ud ever gotten that far in the tourney ric
take it from ro-BERT u need to get off ernies dick
(lol, good closer, but minus points for putting my name in this jp )

Ok, the second round was much closer, no clear winner there, but Dusk gets my vote as he really blew Eric away in the first. Both writers wordplay was clever, and punches were generally creative, but i feel that Dusk came to the table wit more hard hitting punches overall, basically if Eric's first verse had been better (know your capable Eric ) this battle may well have gone down to the wire...but as it stands Dusk gets my vote and advances to the final...
Vote=Dusk (3-0
peace to both writers

[Robert]

btw thats a KO for those that dont know!!!

[oDoUoSoKo]

sweet battle unseen....finals here i come...lol

[Visionz]

^haha its all good homie, ain't no hostility man, good luck w/ it.

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

check call out all mcs.... whare eric the fag get fucked up!!!

[Visionz]

"where" you illiterate dipshit. You still don't want none on the rhymes. You'd get killed in a landside and then you'd blame it on the voters like a lil'bitch. You ain't running shit faggot.

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

"where" you illiterate dipshit. You still don't want none on the rhymes. You'd get killed in a landside and then you'd blame it on the voters like a lil'bitch. You ain't running shit faggot.

my ryhmes are to complex you got sucked up in my vortex. i can tell you wack cause u cant admit canibus is the best. in a mass grave you rest sorry you cant excel cause this thread isnt about insest.

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

dude sounds just like mf doom

this fool in the canibus is the ill mc put mf doom shit there sayin he was the greatest mc, hes always bitin off mf and posing like he has skills! Lynich this fag!!!!!!!!

[Visionz]

my ryhmes are to complex you got sucked up in my vortex. i can tell you wack cause u cant admit canibus is the best. in a mass grave you rest sorry you cant excel cause this thread isnt about insest.

ooooouuuuuu you got alot of gay jokes. YOu're still a wack bitch. Please get off my dick now. thanx

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

ooooouuuuuu you got alot of gay jokes. YOu're still a wack bitch. Please get off my dick now. thanx

this aint no joke caue im pointin out in the ass juices you like to soak right after you take the dick deep throat and son that aint some good shit about to wanna gloat you definetly win the fuckin faggots vote!

[Visionz]

Smoke Blunts=closet homo, how else would someone have soo much gay imagery running around their head?

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

I EAT DICKS DAILY!!!!!!!!!

I got a fine japanese queen that you couldnt even make up in a dream fool! i dont think about it the gayness it comes from you thats whats seen.

[Visionz]

I got a fine japanese drag queen that you couldnt even make up in a dream fool! i dont think about it the gayness it comes from whats seen in my bedroom.

.

[SMOKE BLUNTS]

[QUOTE=Eric Unseen im a dick suckin faggot no name ass and poop dick lickin feind, but i cant get it unless i pay mad green![/QUOTE]

fag! he be changin peoples words and he has no class cause in the ass hell tell u to blast!