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[don tonno]

wassup everybody, first time here and decided to drop couple lines.

In the Zoo.. the sign says.. dont feed the alligator... it might bite you....
Shit is so evil.. that I cant figure out.. to which ear I must bite you..
Lurking in the darkness.. I found out that lightbulb is burned out..
Im so stressed out.. that I take 9 shots from bong just to pass out..
Night of the living dead.. danger!.. animated nowadays like Bible and the Angels..
Surreal like supermodels get paid more than doctors.. ugly culture..
Fucking vultures..
Player.. play some monopoly with me.. I want wallstreet.. no time to waste.. lets greed..
Collusion with the devil.. but I spy for God.. chilling in the park.. smoking some bud..

[b1ack fact10n]

1st 4 lines were a lil shaky, the rest were........uggghh get what Im sayin? need to work on ur rhyming technik cuz....damn!

[Rebel_INS]

Yea needs a little work bro

[GuardianOne]

You have a decent style, work on the way you place your words. Your creativity is one i haven't noticed before. Keep expounding on your thoughts. Your style is interesting.

Peace
PS:Keep posting, and welcome to this Temple!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!