Ok i gave 6 guys true feed back, more than sum shit like "that was dope!" lets see what i get back in return.......
Ok i gave 6 guys true feed back, more than sum shit like "that was dope!" lets see what i get back in return.......
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
nice flow, great at story-tellin and the verse went and licked along at a nice pace, but vocab could defo b improved on. wud sound gud on audio. well played.
ChatNoir.
Thanx on the comment
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
i think it is overall good but becareful of ur imagery,, it mite come across as too far fetched...(regarding ur use of () ) keep doing u..ur going in a great direction..1
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dam yo - patience
verse 2 better than verse 1
get rid of the parentheses
i like the action packed shit
but try switchin up the scenario
i like the story-telling style, but your topic matter is kinda played out
expand the petty crime shit and take it on some inter-galactic shit
it would be fun to read
keep hammering em
all the points have been made
Sellin coke is not petty crimes, that felonoy shit son, but thanx on the comment
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
its petty crime
trust it
all the points have been made
liked it.. second verse is better, all of it flows well though.
but yeah, it just sounds like something ive heard before. not saying you were biting, just want something thats gonna make me go "god damn thats hot". killin someone and pushin coke, like LHX said just a bit played out.
still liked it though, you ever record shit?
Never
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
My room
Come on in, chronic in shoe boxes, its a strong smell yo
In my dresser drawer two oxes, loaded?...bra hell no
Ziplocks for when i sell dro, piles of dirty clothes
Stained sheets, from where i went wild on thrity hoes
Trippin over extension chords, plastic covered windows
To keep heat in, wit little holes where push out the indo
Stashed in my size sixteen timbos, got steel underneath
My nephew's borrowed boy wonder briefs, incase he wanna sneak
In one corner against the wood work, classic shits stacked up (my cd's)
If you happen to see cash leakin out my matress bitch back up!
Hats tucked an fitted wit every single jersey
Hershey cd's in the player, mostly track cuts, wit the volume jacked up
No carpet, hardwood floors wit paint stains
Like raekwon "seven butcher knifes", wit those i shank brains
Tank games, naw just madden and two-k-seven (2k7 b-ball)
Played on a stolen x-box, i copped from this dude named devin
On a coffe table a nineteen inch sony tv, bent antenna
Next to it a big ass gash in the wall, from where i sent a hamma (hammer)
Cuz it jammed in a tight situation, i was fustrated
When i had to dip out fast, before the late bus made it
Right after a stick an move, I did the first part
But i skipped the movin part, fucked me up in a church park
I told a cop, "i'll "play" nice wit yo girl, an let the bitch "beat me"
U don't know pig, i got more "blocks" than a fifty inch tv
He beamed the flash light, i almost got exposed for what i ain't
I'm kinda like a prostitute, cuz i "blow" for what i make
Not dicks, clips stupid, which i got stocked up in my closet
O yea and in my bottom drawer, i got keyz blocked up in hydrolics
When u come in, u smell a stench of rotten meat
Above my head board its a poster of my fam thats gotten sweeped (shot)
I really can't say no more son, the feds might be hungry
(knock knock), shit lemme put out the spliff, in my nike dunny..peace
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
Negative Rap
Light weight, one pound, dumb loud sound wit
The bannana clip, these monkeys can't handle it
Top shaped lika fat candle stick, shit claps analysts
And smokes statistics like them fat camel spliffs
Keep this gun away, dippin wit the runaways
On the move from owners thinkin bout the funna days
What i spits the truth, duke i kid u not
Tobaco rap, tounge's black, like i licked a shot
No fun facts, material mostly guns,gats
Put one on the track, aids sprayed glass, now run that
Hardcore like bun's rap, pheens get they son's clapped
Cocaine based trophy yo.....I said i won crack
Hammers hit hands, thumbs flat, under ground methods
My face scares kids like them thunder sounds, check it
In my hood i wonder round, jus to say what's up
Atleast that's what police think but, i'm really make'in cuts
Bag a brick, break it up, like i'ma construction man
Rapper's say no homo......but still suckin fam
I jus say no polo, catch me by the way i'm bolo
Instead of balls i drop rhymes, u can say i'm romo (tony romo)
One of the best now, an i ain't even started yet
Why u still rollin cars? move so i can park my jet
I "come" fresh......like yo first time
Bhrolic but not squalid, crew do the worst crimes
Resultin in obese wallets, will never cease profits
Most of my cash's "hot", like i got flese pockets
My snow, the cheif "cop" it, he say "the best around"
Throw my uncut in the wind....it lay to rest a town
Fuck wit Big, get yo ankles broke like bryan russel's
Me an this mic is like hammers an nails....crime an hussels
Ok i wrote sumthin today, cuz obviously that last one wastoo long for anybody on the corp to read. This is brand new
Last edited by Bigot Hitman; 03-01-2007 at 07:14 PM.
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
is it really gettin that wack that now the mcz have to (;.............) the meanings of they rhymes....wtf or are u juss writin like this now
"We discourteous creatures, features of repetitive
feaster's,that pray on the opposite optical of logical people"http://www.myspace.com/eversick0666
Well if i don't, then people tend to say shit like i'm jus sayin stuff cuz it rhymes, on my last thread there wasn't much of it. But in the temple people don't wanna take the time to dicyhper shit an stuff so i make it easier for them in hope fora comment. But i really get feed back from a diff site, this is more of a secondary site ya know.
Edited
Last edited by Bigot Hitman; 02-28-2007 at 08:19 PM.
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
o man no beef here son...good lookin actually ure gettin alot better with the rhymes,i havent been on here for madd long and juss saw that i dunno if people dont understand that type shit tho they wouldent be able to feel ure rap anyway
"We discourteous creatures, features of repetitive
feaster's,that pray on the opposite optical of logical people"http://www.myspace.com/eversick0666
^^^
I didn't get what u were sayin on the real at first, i thought u were sayin is my shit gettin so wack that i gotta do the (adgfad)'s, an if i was just writing wack like this now. Justa misunderstanding
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
http://www.wutang-corp.com/forum/sho...=25482&page=61
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