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    [Verse 1]
    Though I’m lazy as hell, my words are incredibly able
    To smash solid steel blocks, or even level a table
    I’m my… enemies’ savior; my mind is mixed with a weapon
    Hell, my thoughts alone kill off planets in a fifth of a second
    I’m itchin’ to test it… so please don’t tempt me to merk you
    Cuz your pleas do not faze me, like my enemies words duke
    When my verse spews, it endangers civilians
    Have the world death toll then placed in the millions
    I’m abrasive to children…stealing candy from babies
    Causing explosions whenever people claim that I’m crazy
    Smashing these faggy heroes with zero depth of my power
    Body count only increases in deaths by the hour
    Incredibly sour, I stay curled in awkward places
    Plotting vengeance and sometimes, world domination
    I’m an abomination, My father never hugged me man
    So I grew up scheming on how to mug ya gramps

    CHORUS X 4
    I’m the alien villain, not known…scaring your children
    Not seen in the books, cuz my my hooks is impairing ya vision


    second verse will come mad short, feed on the first and the chorus

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    jus btw, i really didn't do my skill justice on this shit, its some fuckshit to be recorded

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    This is really fucken bad. I'd delete it and forget I ever wrote it if I were you...Fucken horrible.

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    hahaa^ .. writing aspects were good, jus the lyrics weren't .. maybe focus less on rhyming the last three words of each line, and focus more on what your sayin... if you commit to a certain format it limits what your able to say.. you end up usin words jus cuz they rhyme.. makin the verse pointless

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    Quote Originally Posted by .:ArcherPriest:. View Post
    hahaa^ .. writing aspects were good, jus the lyrics weren't .. maybe focus less on rhyming the last three words of each line, and focus more on what your sayin... if you commit to a certain format it limits what your able to say.. you end up usin words jus cuz they rhyme.. makin the verse pointless
    thanks king, u know ur a really cool cat man

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