first verse

[jallainINS]

hey this is like my first one ever i couldnt sleep the other night so i just started writin at like 3 in the mornin. if you arent a fan of the Red Sox you might not get some of the lines. and i know theres a lot of Wu references but i intended that, its like a Red Sox, Wu tribute of sorts.

Top of the first now its just the beginning

Me against you for a full nine innings

Step up to the plate kid whaddya say?

Three strikes blown right by ya, rack-up another K

My wordplay, will have you on your knees beggin' please

But I be crushin' the ball out the park like Ortiz

You laugh?...thinkin' I'm full of hot gas

Watch me step up to the plate wit' my Hellz Wind Staff

Ya got GZA on the hill, and RZA behind the plate

INS at first, and Johnny Blaze at third base

I'm layin it down right now without a riddle

Ghost and Rae turnin' double plays up the middle

U-God and Masta Killa makin' baserunners yield

ODB, RIP, I'll take your place in center field

In the batters box I've never been struck out

My fans shout, go find your seat in the dugout

You be swingin' and missin more times then Bellhorn

While I'm smackin' game winnin' grand slams like Mo Vaughn...

On and on, kid the skills don't drop

Like I don't quit runnin' till I hit the backstop

Show me what ya got, I'm hittin' in the number four spot

Cuz my bat got pop, and my style is hot

Basically, I'm everythin' that your not

And I'm shootin to the top quicker then a Deck Dart

Billy Beane couldn't trade ya in a ten team deal

Rickey Henderson couldn't even teach ya how to steal

So listen up, cuz I'm only gonna say this one time

Forget baseball and rap, cuz you can't hit or rhyme

yeah i basically wrote it to rap while smokin with my friends while they drop beats. but tell me what ya think.

[Ebo]

Nice theme and wordplay.

No wonder you couldn't sleep while your friends were dropping beats...

[MASTER PAI MEI]

If this is your first ever I say keep scripting because this was cool but your only gonna get better...PEACE

[Lyrical Genius]

thats my boy

[Knok-A-Fella]

liked it alot

wordplay was brilliant

and u managed to transfer wu and baseball without overplayin the whole thing

Bless ,1

[jallainINS]

thanks guys, thats encouraging.

[GuardianOne]

You should be more creative. And when you use reference to other famous people you should be careful. The verse had a limited flow (seemed to come back to were it started). You need to work on how you want to express and gain in your skill on verse.

Peace
PS: Keep posting