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    Lightbulb Ellusive-Fugitive **\\Thread//**

    barely literate youths band like wolf packs, teeth bared,
    hungry eyes shine a sublime, haunting shade of black,
    trapped, dont make eye contact,
    threat so real and heartfelt, pray for courage to counteract
    developed instincts is mandatory, lights nearly extinct
    hatred smoulders, heavy shoulders,
    soldiers blast revolvers, babies sniffin' solvents

    time reveals, unhealed scars, fight continues, until the last

    not even reservations, for fertile lands taken,
    forced incarceration on aboriginal nations,
    first all able men wrongfully taken,
    then 1200 armed troops sent, women and children raped,
    fatherless boys, emotionally void, world destroyed,
    as peaceful villages burn smoke clouds, choked crowds,
    picture of mothers on knees hands raised, wailing to god loud,

    time reveals, unhealed scars, incarcerated in iron bars

    from ashes chastised natives born with urban eyes,
    desensitised, concrete tribes, still the earth cries,
    call 'em x, phoenix, spirits weakened violent leanings
    twist necks, welfare checks & street respect, break thumbs,
    no escape as venomous tongues leave you stung,
    young teens, degenerate fiends, seek next victims,
    no problem, beating & robbin' for crumbs, fucked up stars of the slums,


    time reveals, unhealed scars, incarcerated in iron bars

    Distorted thought reflecting out broken panes,
    master of no-sword sowing seed in physical plains,
    constant struggling, nourishing,
    perpetual karma, peaceful warriors armor
    dabbling metaphysical heavens made me intuitive,
    elusive fugitive, meditating on how we live...

    as sky thundering,
    street lights stuttering, my soul is shuddering,
    in foreign tongues muttering, philosophical utterings
    unacknowledged history, its misery, a legacy of inhumanity,
    flooding deepest recess of subconscious memory,
    visions appear before me, ancestors warning,
    a beacon, guiding I through stormy,
    volatile infuriations on seas of incarnation,
    torn between two warring nations of my creation,
    that flag aint nothing but a blood soaked rag
    broken hearted on the curb
    sipping cheap liquor outta paper bag
    savouring super-natural wisdom of the zigzags

    time reveals, unhealed scars, incarcerated in iron bars

    Devils relentless, after pillaging the defenceless,
    grandmothers' beaten for expressing self in native sentence,
    forgotten society, colonial piracy, roof shaking violently, the proud suffer silently...

    wisdom from beyond the sum of years,
    see wounds irrepairable,
    its traces, etched upon they faces, to most illegible
    unending ripples, its terrible
    praying for death,
    in gunpowder cultures depicted by Wyclef,
    an albatross' teardrops,
    our way of life stopped

    once were heralded by royal trumpets, lived righteous, love abundant,
    now days are numbered on walls of spiritual dungeons,
    still my heart travels home at night through iron bars...

    Elusive Fugitive





















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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    ....this is very well written... i felt it all the way through... nice imagery, i could see the fiends robbing on streets for their crumbs... i like the flow... you have a nice lexicon....


    "twist necks, welfare checks & street respect, break thumbs,
    no escape as venomous tongues leave you stung,
    young teens, degenerate fiends, seek next victims,
    no problem, beating & robbin' for crumbs, fucked up stars of the slums, "


    "that flag aint nothing but a blood soaked rag
    broken hearted on the curb
    sipping cheap liquor outta paper bag
    savouring super-natural wisdom of the zigzags"


    the whole thing was definately quotable anywhere.... i liked this repeated part alot too... i hope you keep scriptting on this site, it needs more writers like you... i like the title as wel...


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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    dope imagery and rhymes. nice shit. ... nahmsayin, it's fuckin ill cause it's got some good meta4s for some street shit. ..... like to see some more from you. peace
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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    Hey.......
    Its a long verse, the first contained its own way of capitvation and steadily progressed to the next. The fourth changed its momentum, as did the following seemed to get toward a personal expounded way . But it was a nice verse or verses. And well placed.

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    thankyou to my peers for the positive feedback, it is much appreciated keep'em coming...

    ONE LOVE

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    beautiful... see, now that's real visual street poetry, plain and simple... very well constructed, you grabbed me with the first line, and i held on tight until the end... very solid... it's what i like to see, and i'm lookin' forward to readin' more...
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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    real nice worduse but in the same light the flow was off
    and I'm not to sure on the exact topic so I'm assuming
    its a "life sucks" piece, but over I like the
    style you come with regardless..keepin it Wu I geuss

    stay up~1~

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    Default Alone...

    mine has never been the stylised, oppressively organised
    rank and file, black and white profile of god,
    prefer mine seasoned with salt of the un-civilised
    odd, you may say, hanging my hat in the company of strays,
    castaways individuals displayed in every conceivable shade of grey
    spoken wordplay my new testament served raw on dinner trays
    gourmet food for soul like resplendant bursts of the suns rays
    illuminate niggling nonsense on your conscience
    spit a rhyme so profound your soul climbs,
    sparing you a life bowing to idols in the sinister shrines of primetime
    dropping two pockets full of dimes, turning water into wine,
    indifference the most heinous crime

    inhaling lung-fulls of polluted air,
    blistered feet walking concrete streets,
    in the city aint no-one got time to care
    about a mans fragile hopes and prayers,
    sometimes its hard, being a shepherd in dark valleys of mind slayers
    desperately draw enough blood to pay fare
    on commuter trains shipping human cargo into the dragons lair,
    deliberate as the masses wish away their years,
    quietly strangled by uncontrolled fear of they peers
    filing one by one in neat lines and disillusioned stares,
    visions of apocalyptic matrix engineers

    free thought drowned out by a billion barrages of ringing tills
    corporate coffers exploding with mills,
    but half a mans life's spent slaving for bills,
    nothing to lose, I choose the redpill,
    swill it around with a 5th of cuervo, chilled, spark a bone & get ill
    drill into vast treasures of mental wealth,
    diving headfirst, riding twisted for self
    In a packed room of people but mostly it feels like there's noone else
    and I am alone...


    Elusive-Fugitive








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    Default Re: Alone...

    original stuff, man.

    on commuter trains shipping human cargo into the dragons lair,
    deliberate as the masses wish away their years,


    feelin the last 2 verses, keep postin. peace
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    Don't be complaining to me when your bitch plays your ass and takes your money.



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    Default Re: Alone...

    Hott lyrics man ,keep it up

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    Uppin! everyone should read this again...

    Those who have something to fall back on, always do.

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    ... i gotta agree, every one should read this again... by the way Mr. Fugitive, the flow is not off...

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    very nice, felt mad smooth to read, its got sublime imagery and the whole structure of it just seems perfect to read

    like psy says, its poetry...i really enjoyed this piece with a message

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    Thankyou to everyone who took the time to read this posting. Your feedback is moving on a personal level. This was the first piece I ever wrote...

    ONE LOVE

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    Default Re: feather of an albatross

    Can you say DAMN!!! I don't know how I even missed this one. Your style is completely off the chain, and you definitely have a way with words. This piece was so fluid like ... it just FLOWED beautifully. Big Ups for ringing the bells of knowledge and truth.

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