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    FRESH FISH
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    Default Nowhere

    Broken windows, no soul around. Walls painted by rain and mold. The cold wind swept in the decay. A swingset hangs by one chain. A few doves break trough the silence. The sound of wings. They take off. Abandoning a place you wouldn't go to. The roads lead nowhere, there is no purpose. Time exists only because of change and movement.
    Isn't that powerful?

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    Default Re: Nowhere

    This was quite intense, and you managed to capture the readers imagination where you wanted them to be..It is powerful. You have a standard set in verse (or Poetry, or RAP) but it was a good verse.

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    PS: Wnat to see more of your posts!!!!!!!!!

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