VOTES NEEDED-Makaveli662 Vs. Shizzah

[Maccabee Ridah]

1 round, 16 barz, I will drop first...?!

Wanna do this shyt or not..?!

[Ritter]

It's on Mak.Drop whenever you feel like.

[Maccabee Ridah]

Here is my part:

Aiyo, I wormed up with demented, now goin for u bitch,
Every next battle my rapping style switch.
My rhymes r maybe weak, but they r killin u slow,
Listen to the vibe, feel the heat of da flow.
U wanna front me? U have somethin with me to settle?
No?! I thought so, I guess u will run away be4 end of battle!
My style is like herion, urs like fuckin candy,
I'm dissing u son, like mef Williams Wendy.
There is no father to my style, I'm unique like a Zorro,
Making crowd wild, make u feel sorrow.
Dissing me in my area, that act is fuckin mad,
I'm have to burry ya, cuz u r fuckin dead. *gunshot*
Too sorry, but I guess this waz ur final duel,
I fucked u so hard & u ran out of fuel.
So u better respect me like I was one of the wu,
I am finishing u off, so hail me with da "-suuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu"...

Now u......
Peace............

[Ritter]

Yo Yo,Its me up in this bitch
You better run like I was a witch
You wonder why my pen finger twitch?
Im the killer,im the best,and youre next
Me without a style is like a cop without a vest
My darts pierce right through your chest
Im dirty,insane,horrifyngly plain
Shout my name,and damn your style will be cocaine
Sprayed in the air,in a form of dust
Mine will stay sharp steel without a rust
And Zorro isnt unique,there are so many films
Yet you dare metaphore that inside my realm
After I finish with you,you'll be a blurry memory
I warn you know,you won't see the end of me
After you visualise my rhyme,you'll try and render me
This round is over,and for your sake,it better be

[Maccabee Ridah]

any1 to vote???

[oDoUoSoKo]

votes people

[oDoUoSoKo]

flow-Mak
punches-shiz
wordplay-shiz
vocab-shiz

interesting battle, need some practice guys...but that's what ur doing in any case...Mak, ur english is a bit strange...practice that, but good battle, dont stop.

[Maccabee Ridah]

flow-Mak
punches-shiz
wordplay-shiz
vocab-shiz

interesting battle, need some practice guys...but that's what ur doing in any case...Mak, ur english is a bit strange...practice that, but good battle, dont stop.

Yeah man, I know what u r talkin bout...
I wrote that for 10 mins, I just could not concentrate on language......
And do not worry, I won't stop, I like it here, this is yet my 2nd battle, hope more & more comin....

[Guarded By Martyrs]

Flow ~ Makaveli
Punchelines ~ Shizzah
Wordplay ~ Shizzah
Vocabulary ~ Shizzah

Obviously going first is much harder...
My advice Mak would be to be a bit more visual...
And try and build up for one srtong Punchline at the end say ???
Like Shizzah's last line.

PEACE

[Mic Tyson]

both was pretty good but ima have to give it to Shizzah

[Maccabee Ridah]

It seems like this was KO....
True congrants to Sizz for great battle and for the win...

[Ritter]

Props on your verse. Keep writing, work more on the vocab and you'll do great.
Good battle

[Visionz]

My rhymes r maybe weak, but they r killin u slow,


Im dirty,insane,horrifyngly plain



guess this battle's already over, just as advice yall might want to avoid talkin shit about yourselves in the future, keep at it

[oDoUoSoKo]

actually 2-0, Mic has to elaborate...

[Visionz]

In that case Sizzah gots this one with the more direct punches and an overall wittier verse, both could use some practice with imagery and being concise, peace to both yall