Signs of Life

[Killer Falcon]

a new song i wrote, criticism is appreciated


stayed true, then see what sign i came to
remained faithful i see a wise and shining angel
speaking fables i can fix my turning tables
turn the same route to destiny it almost failed
at every turn, lurking snakes and serpents
prey on weak mental orphans for endurance
rich life abusive so i journey one of music
fuck a student after school i rhyme like fluid
cant see any point, without an aim in life
theres no meaning when the cash is raining bright
or so i tell myself, dreams about the wealth
corrupt all minds mental porcupines strike in stealth
subliminal messages sent through television
obsessive young heads are swiftly sent to cinders
opium to minds, portal escape a real life
inside a box energy fulfills another sacrifice
didnt take that fork, i stray on other thoughts
independent trails they lead toward self knowledge
faith in ballads, but still i feel abandoned
lost like computer data stuck beneath a magnet
what a coincidence, trained in the same things
counting 1's and 0's fuelling economic slave ships
bite other rappers if their making more than you
i stay off that kinda thing and rhyme about the truth
politicians force your growth inside a social noose
invoke your views and tighten, if you try to move
i look ahead lands spread towards deserts
is there a sign for me? or is it never-ending

i lay stranded, in an arctic wastland
stuck beneath the deepest thoughts in avalanche
feel anger, then melt them with a paragraph
fireballs in heart burn and carve my future path
frozen staffs, flow from my lung passage
dances in mind until all corruption shatters
purify my soul so i meditate alone
explosive mental growth within a wall of chrome
into waterfalls, i unleash my mental flows
past the gardens with the red and flawless roses
seems enormous, an echo of a chorus
sung from mother natures ever-loving forest
glare on sun beams, illuminates a meadow
lush green grass makes me think that i can settle
impending viper nettles, hang on silver tree-tops
leap off a cliff edge, thought it was a single rock
full twists as i plummet through the mist
to the centre of life, a single warp exists
not yet ready, wings take me back to land
to scorge whatever else the devil had it planned
signs of life i chose, led toward a canyon
the path was dark but i lit my hearts lantern
train of thought drives on melancholic tracks
beneath firestorms of ice that dives to smash
societies prison i'm living levels deeper
no broken bars, i still recieve mental freedom

peace

[noel411]

That was quite a good piece. Nothing spectacular, just a clean, consistent couple of verses. Flow was well on point. Lyrics and rhyme scheme were fairly basic, but your description and wording is very good. I don't really have anything negative to say about that. You know what you're doing.

One thing though, what did this mean?

i rhyme like fluid

[Shitao]

You know how I love your style Winte. Nice verses.

PEACE

[Mantra]

Keep blessin' us wit cha' scrolls winte peace.

[Ronin]

nice shit, you got a definitive style and your imagery and flow is on point as usual

would sound tight when recorded

nice shit bro

[Killer Falcon]

thanks a lot for the feedback everyone

peace

[Idiom]

i agree wit' aLL those chimps above you,
content, flow, topic. i reaLLy like the fact that you didn't jump off it
like most people do...anyhow two thumbs up dun

i'd stiLL rip you a new asshole though

OmO < Idiom

[Idiom]

NO, NO don't take it personal i was just joking

or was i

that is the right question..

no j/f wit' ya bro

Peace

OmO < Idiom

[Fragmented]

lol winte i remember that long ass battle we had on psy site peace nice peace kinda along your usual style try and drop a audio of this wold be nice to hear

i'll give u a breakdown laters i've got a hangover to contend with

peace

[Killer Falcon]

^^ peace is that stormcloud? i'm recording this song soon i'll put it up when its finished

thanks for the feedback everyone

peace