(((0o o0 o00o ~- noel411 Thread -~o00o 0o o0)))

[Locust]

fucking nice verses noel, you didnt try to over do the rhyme schemes and avoided any unnesecary lines which was cool. some of the first verse was too personal or too deep for me to understand, but its all good either way. the second one was all truth, felt what youre saying
and I’m not picking on Jay, or even the mainstream,
underground’s just as lame, in some ways the same scene

[Logik1991]

yeah thats a nice smooth read there , i didnt once think 'why did he rhyme this like tha' or none of that shit , i think all your rhyme schemes was justified , and that was well worth readin

keep spittin lord

maintain

[cd]

Trash. And if you're gonna mention the God, actually make the 2 lines rhyme

[noel411]

Cheers for the feed my peoples. Glad you enjoyed it.

[GuardianOne]

The first verse seemed as though it was difficult to create, like no real aim. The second verse was better, extremely simple. You used a lot of real elements, not being too creative.

You took quite a bold step in writing such a verse.

Peace
PS: The first four lines of the first verse, showed you strained or had difficulty tryignt to write. Repeating actually...

[Father N Dangerous]

word noel u killed it man, everything was flawless IMO!! loveing ya wordplay, good to see you still doing you, and always good to read a fellow emcee's piece, specially one so lyrically potent, we should collab sumtime. can't wait ta see wat else u come up with! stay ^ keep blessin yo

[noel411]

Guardian, I'm puzzled as to why you feel that way about the first verse. That style of writing is very natural to me. I actually used to write almost everything in a metaphorical manner, especially when writing about my own struggles, which I used to do an awful lot. I was reading through my old rhymes the other day. It was actually what inspired me to write that verse. But as always, I appreciate your input, just a little unsure as to why you felt that way about that verse.

And cheers for the kind words W & D. Always appreciated.

[GuardianOne]

Guardian, I'm puzzled as to why you feel that way about the first verse.

Nah, don't worry, just take it literally.

Anyway, Keep up the good work.

Peace
PS: Keep posting and writting ( and reciting...)

[Dae Ja Nae]

I came to this game, no desire or strategy,
don't need others feed to inspire or flatter me,
if my flames hit your frame then fire them back at me,
conceded to greed but decided it had to be,
it’s frightening actually, how things change over time,
like back when I heard my first J Hova rhyme,
just another mc, a fish in the ocean,
but look what happened through the gift of promotion,
feed him to the drones ‘n he receives their devotion,
say he’s overrated, it’s an obscene scary notion,
and I’m not picking on Jay, or even the mainstream,
underground’s just as lame, in some ways the same scene,
they’re both fashion games, where they follow the leader,
and Sebastian Cain is not as hollow as either,
they’re both ruled by trends which the artists conform to,
when the foolishness ends, remember which artist warned you,
but they scorn you like whores when you do your own thing,
so to clones this drones like a boring phone ring,
while Soup Bones wrist flows like some chrome rims,
my words twice as potent if spoken by a known king,
but with no reputation I stay in the shadows,
with those with weak writtens, no ambition, or bad flows,
but this mastermind’s passed the time when I had those,
and still can’t even pack a row at a rap show,
but I do this for self, it doesn’t matter to me,
who’s better than who or who’s fatter than me,
do you, I’ll continue to do what comes naturally.

Another nice piece noel ...

The second verse really had me open though ... it flowed just like water. Don't get me wrong now, the first verse was cool to, but the second just seemd a little more focused and effortless to me. Perhaps they were written at two different times or perhaps while you were in a different state of mind ... who knows, either way eye'm feeling it.

Peace

[noel411]

Hey Dae, what's poppin'? Been a while. Thanks for the reply. You're right about the second verse being more focused, because while I was writing the first I knew what I was gonna write in the second, and was already thinking of lines for it. Both were fairly effortless though. Anyway, cheers again.

[Muslimah]

Gday mate,

Firstly, GO THE EELSSSSSS.

Secondly, you should be flattered. I remembered you telling me about a verse you had written, so i made sure i checked it out, even though right now im at TAFE and tired as.

I am tempted to take the same line as CD and say what utter shit this piece is, but i guess you will just have to settle for the truth. That is, that im glad i took the time out to read this tonight, it is a true reflection of the immense skill you have.

This was definately not time wasted.

Peace

[noel411]

Ha, I actually thought you read it back when I sent you a link on MSN.

Thanks for the kind words, family member. Appreciated.

Go the Eels!!!

[ElusiveFugitive]

Props Noel, another ill drop...Your first verse was obviously very personal & abstract, possibly the type of verse you write in a journal. As Locust said, without knowing you better its difficult to grasp at the true meaning........ The 2nd verse I found I could relate to better, great content and flow. Quotables; "I came to this game, no desire or strategy, don't need others feed to inspire or flatter me, if my flames hit your frame then fire them back at me", "but I do this for self, it doesn’t matter to me,who’s better than who or who’s fatter than me,do you, I’ll continue to do what comes naturally" Peace - Elusive

[noel411]

Whatup EF? Glad you stopped by to peep this. Thanks for the reply.