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[BlaK FuRYaN]

Beads of sweat, dripping from my forehead,
greed has led, to my profits being squandered,
I leave regret, in every town I wander,
I bleed to death, just to clear my conscience,
I ponder the thought, of what brought me to this state,
I might have won an award, for my skill in dodging fate,
relentlessly push forward, like the crest of a wave,
there's too many stories, in my nest full of hate,
too little glory, in the steps that I take,
I can't go on ignoring, the test that awaits,
I detest the arrest of my soul that I've made,
I invest in regret to digress from ritual hate,
deflect voices in my brain, to maintain an individual state,
reject habits ingrained, so I don't regress to traditional ways,
confess to bless my name, but I'm cast away in a spiritual maze,
inject drugs in my veins,
expect to ease the pain, but it's met with minimal gain,
my self denial techniques recieved with critical acclaim,
my lack of self belief acts like a criminals chains,
a disease that leaves me clinically insane,
the struggle within is the epitomy of pain,
move past the last disaster thinking "will it be the same?",
when I progress to the next step of this rigorous game,
the digger of my own grave, pull the trigger, then I aim,
gamble six figures when I've only got a dollar to my name,
search for a gas leak with an open flame,
put me in a grave, lock and chain, flush the key down the drain,
my skin stays clean and free of pain, but I bleed every day.

I WEREN'T CHECKIN FOR ANY MULTIES OR FLOW BUT I SAW SOME NICE WORDS UPPIN THERE I LIKED AND THE CONTENT WAS AIGHT, DEFINATELY DEPRESSING. I ALSO LIKED THE 7TH MESSIAH STYLE VERSE U DROPPED TOO.....
KEEP EM COMMIN


ELAVATIN'

[noel411]

Thanks for the feed, Furyan. The 7th Messiah shit was a joke, as you probably know, but yeah, it's always fun writing some shit like that, haha. But why did you highlight the lines you did?

And btw Martyr, well picked up on this........

the flow was pretty much on point through out except for the "I" before "aim"....

I actually debated with myself whether I should put that "I" there or not. At first there was no "I", then as I was rapping it back to myself in my head, I felt it worked better with an "I". I guess it just depends on how you plan to spit it.

[Jabba Jaw]

cant knock this at all

flow was solid pretty much the whole way through

multis were sick
extensive vocab

nice drop overall
keep at it

[noel411]

Thanks dude.

[Mantra]

Big up Noel for the terrorist flow!

[noel411]

Thanks James.

[Necromancer]

very original rhyme scheme and it had a solid intro
peace

[noel411]

Thanks for the feed.

[BlaK FuRYaN]

the words i highlighted were the lines i liked most in your verse.....


peace

Thanks for the feed, Furyan. The 7th Messiah shit was a joke, as you probably know, but yeah, it's always fun writing some shit like that, haha. But why did you highlight the lines you did?

And btw Martyr, well picked up on this........
I actually debated with myself whether I should put that "I" there or not. At first there was no "I", then as I was rapping it back to myself in my head, I felt it worked better with an "I". I guess it just depends on how you plan to spit it.

[noel411]

Ok. Cool.

[noel411]

For a quarter of a cent, I'd repent for my sins,
for free I don't believe I'd achieve anything,
at most I might recieve a decieving peace within,
the foundations of which, I percieve to be thin,
I'm leaving my skin, as my soul takes a journey,
see Satan's patience waning, as he's waiting to burn me,
I continue elevating, until I see what a bird sees,
but as the clouds fall behind me, my sight becomes blurry,
know I've outstayed my welcome when a force starts to turn me,
I descend feeling helpless, like a dead leaf on a fern tree,
to enhance my learning, I question what happened,
get stuck on the first thing, why did my vision blacken?
was there really a force, that set my course backwards?
who controlled my actions while this time was elapsing?
to find the truth within, is a thing that takes practice,
you don't step on the pitch, and score an instant hat trick,
I need light to assist, but I'm fresh out of matches,
to gather proof, I stretch the truth like elastic,
my pretence is cracking like an egg when it hatches,
I snap back to reality, and I'm back where I started,
no closer to my goal than when my soul departed,
wear a crooked smile, painted by a drunken artist,
I can walk a hundred miles, but the first step is the hardest.

[Ronin]

nice thoughtful shit son, flowed good

kinda reminded me of some shit i wrote a while back or the steez i was on like thoughtful perspective shit

good stuff my aussie counterpart

ENGLAND FOR THE ASHES HAHAHA

[noel411]

Thanks my pasty faced devil counterpart.

If England win the ashes I'll get drunk on warm beer and pick up a pale, pasty, fat slob.

Anyone else?

[Muslimah]

you know i have always respected your work... even though you are a pain in the ass, but hey, anybody good by anna is good by me... haha

[noel411]

Haha, thanks family. You have made Anna a happy woman today.