Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?

[LikwidSwordz]

Im jus sayin dont make fun of him if you cant do better.....and im not talkin about "saying your better" im talkin about proving it.....but its only directed at those who called him "whack" of course.

[Maxi Million]

Dont hate on people if you cant do better for all you saying this kid is 'WHACK'

ayo thanx for dabacup, leave dat shit like dat.

[Maxi Million]

My raps contaminate you like harmful gases/
the venemous compounds that kill your cells in the masses/
not immune, ur white cells violently crashes/
you lookin at the flashes as your past life passes/
through your eyes, pigment like cherries that blasted/ like violent guns/
I be the blunt smoke in your lungs/
the shit that gets niggas addicted who turn into bums/
their test has begun, lack confidence cuz their homework aint done.

[Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah]

text means nothin if you can't spit in real life....you can't really tell the flow or anything

[Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah]

You got potential, but still need alot of practice to get better with your style. I think originality is the best thing any emcee should own....I mean, i admire alot of cats, like Tonedeff, but it doesnt mean ima rap like him....so yea, just improve your vocab, and try to make your lines more lyrical than the obvious disses...keep elevating

yeah that's what i saw too, i mean, if you wanna say your rhymes GZA style, you gotta have more metaphors than what you have.....it's good but just too basic to say it's on a GZA level.....but word, just take this and keep building, cause it's the only way you'll get better

[100pr00f]

no one is saying he is wack...read the topic of the fourm...think befor u post u make ur self look like a ass.....nodisrispect.........

every one is saying he should pick his own style...i said his verce is no where neer the style of gza...couse gza comes hard...u have to think when u listen to him...here he just spits lines after line.....realy no story to the verce..

[100pr00f]

he got some skill..need to work on the metas...and put a meaning to it...like not strait up killing some one or a battle verce when ur not battleing....ur word play is ok..it helps the flow

[Maxi Million]

he got some skill..need to work on the metas...and put a meaning to it...like not strait up killing some one or a battle verce when ur not battleing....ur word play is ok..it helps the flow

ayo good looks, and like i said b4 dis aint really my style, im jus immitatin Gza. although i do be coming wit shit like dat most times.

[Maxi Million]

My raps contaminate you like harmful gases/
the venemous compounds that kill your cells in the masses/
not immune, ur white cells violently crashes/
you lookin at the flashes as your past life passes/
through your eyes, pigment like cherries that blasted/ like violent guns/
I be the blunt smoke in your lungs/
the shit that gets niggas addicted who turn into bums/
their test has begun, lack confidence cuz their homework aint done.

[Maxi Million]

i know what yall be saying about battle verse, but das jus one part of my style sorry if it feel like a battle to u.



I'm like Vicks VapoRub messin wit yo fucking eyes/
the flow up your nose while your brain slowly dies/
could be a bird's brain it doesnt matter the size/
when da scent hits u from da neck up inside/
short circuit ur whole head only da lice survives/
my rhymes are contagious nigga dats no surprise/
like dirty dogz with dice, posting on da corner store/
the elctric shock wont be enough to restore ur core/
dis shit got you cryin like a virgin's pussy tore.

[Maxi Million]

this is more how my style is


Summer time makes, phony niggas heated/
my bat they eat it, i swing like sosa they end up beated/
but the most real heat, is created in the oven/
so i always visit the kitchen, to cook ribs often/
boilin their veins molten, realize there's no token/
to ride the train to heaven, but for me the gate's broken/
i get a free pass, like Kelis said to NaS, but for now im woken/
the stove leaves their body soakin, with natural juice nigga's heart is open.



If you're wondering, yeh im Dominican.

[Maxi Million]

yeah that's what i saw too, i mean, if you wanna say your rhymes GZA style, you gotta have more metaphors than what you have.....it's good but just too basic to say it's on a GZA level.....but word, just take this and keep building, cause it's the only way you'll get better

lol, i neva said my shit is on Gza's level, im jus immitin how he rhymes. anyways dat verse up there is how my style really is.

[deadlymelody]

If you wanna be like GZA, don't waste any lines. Every single line in a GZA verse is meaningful, it isn't filler.

[Maxi Million]

If you wanna be like GZA, don't waste any lines. Every single line in a GZA verse is meaningful, it isn't filler.

lmao son, u late on dis, I aint gon waste no more lines xplainin to you.

[Liquidswordsman]

Im jus sayin dont make fun of him if you cant do better.....and im not talkin about "saying your better" im talkin about proving it.....but its only directed at those who called him "whack" of course.

Shit, i think he is wack. get your own style. Trust me when i tell u Rae dont want no niggas sounding like wu-tang members on no album, or thread. I make fun of people that do shit i cant, and i love doing it