Just stumbled upon this thread and I thought maybe I'd post my 1st attempt at a verse ever. I was looking at the rap battles thread and i kind of made my rap into a battle verse(tried anyway)

My rhymes toy with your brain cells, Premature visions of hell
Noone can save you, step into the ring, your cautious, curious to see what i bring,
Surprise in your eyes, Witness to an extrordinary thing

You're scared, you're nervous, What do you do? Can't back out, Flashbacks of bein bullied in school
This is an art, a science, You can't understand.
Lyricism with heart, Defiant, No ordinary man.

I pity the foo, Your down from my quick one twos, minds gettin foggy
Hallucinatin Swishas N Herb with Bob Marley
Your a bitch, a biter, Your Joe Buttons Blogging

Flow sounds off when i say it out loud, but i dunno how to reword it.

Just curious for some thoughts, advice....