(VOTES NEEDED) POEM vs. OBJECTIVE

**Poetic Wun** · 08-05-2009, 11:54 PM

1 round.
20 bars.
you choose whose first...
or just pop off.

**Objective** · 08-06-2009, 04:50 AM

I dont care, lets just post it up when where done, since its only 1 round no feed/dissing of the first droppers verse. 5 days to drop or DQ.

Good luck.

**Objective** · 08-06-2009, 06:19 AM

You think i wanna battle you? I use this as introduction,
600 posts n still dont know the basics of consctruction.
You cant photoshop your rhyme to make it look good,
Your avatar is lying, the agony of hustling the hood.
Poetic Wun a fuckin pun with signatures of double d,
Your not the one, twenty six and barely reached puberty.
Have you got hair on it yet? You better start to forget,
I aim at your crotch to get writh of minimal respect.
Your interests on your page is good for a start,
But you seriously suck at any medium of art.

Lets get back to your signature, dont fuck with crimes,
Got his hands up in hope it defends from my rhymes.
You got a Dare Devil, i got someone blessed from Hell,
If you think you can beat anyone i got something to tell.
Theres twenty bars, but it feels like i go out with more,
Your lines is a personal diss against yourself you whore.
I could have left this blank, and still get plenty of votes,
I only made this shit to up the count of my posts.
I just beat a retarded guy thats been around for ages,
The only friends he got is shown on his wu-tang pages.

**Poetic Wun** · 08-07-2009, 01:04 AM

ima bout to show you how first is second...
observe as i lay out my objective...
i'ma aim for your eyes as i kick this shit...
i ain't sick when i spit, i spit a sickness...
leave you twitchin on the floor from a leathal infection...
as i give your purdy little mouth a semen injection...
and i ain't ill, nigga, hell, i figure i'm wack...
so if i'm the victor then whats that say about yerrr aaaasss???
you ain't Alucard, you gone once your heads severed...
oh remember you was askin for feedback, well here some: GET BETTER!!!
did you really say "you will lose cause im that fuckin tight"...
lol when it comes to wit, i guess your bulb aint too bright...
you could use all the help you can get, even if you battlin me...
so if you was shook that i'd clown, you coulda just gone after me...
that way you coulda really "gone after me" and pick apart each one of these lines...
you kinda clown on yourself typin them cottony soft rhymes...
but i guess i'll abide by the rules if you guna be gay...
lemme guess your guna clown on my sig or something equally cliche...
so if we goin that route then keep aimlessly aimin' that gun...
as i leave you paranoid in the dark--
fightin yourself--
peace nigga--
have fun.

**Eradicate** · 08-07-2009, 03:12 AM

punches, delivery, flow, personals - poetic.

\v/ = poetic

**Sun Supreme** · 08-07-2009, 06:14 PM

I like poetic. Better lines all together.

**oDoUoSoKo** · 08-07-2009, 06:37 PM

elaborate homey

**daliff89** · 08-09-2009, 07:06 PM

Poetic's shit was better, even though he said he face fucked the other dude and gave him an infection.....

no homo.

better punches from Poetic, other dude had more personals, but his rhyme scheme was horribly simple.....

VOTE: Poetic Wun

someone battle me god dammit.

**Poetic Wun** · 08-09-2009, 07:13 PM

lol when you read it that way it does sound kinda funky... not what i meant tho...
"spit a sickness" then gave him a "semen injection"...
altho i did say "as"... shit
lol anyway i'll battle you. i dont really care if these things take forever to finish i got time on my hands.

**Objective** · 08-09-2009, 10:55 PM

Congrats with the win Poetic

Daliff; Your right, my scheme was too simple.. I'll try to up my game a bit in the next battle, try to experiment a bit more. Was good to join a battle again, been some time since i joined one.

Peace out ^^

**Poetic Wun** · 08-09-2009, 11:08 PM

im not sure if the deal is sealed, thats on dusk since Supreme wasnt elaborate.
either way, my respect fam. that line about photoshop had me lol'ing man.

**oDoUoSoKo** · 08-10-2009, 04:32 PM

2-0 CMON!! WE ALMOST GOT 2 BATTLES DONE IN A WEEK!! eloels.

**dansx-flex** · 08-14-2009, 01:19 PM

yo i really want to vote objective on the basis that wun dropped a line that made himself sound hella gay. And if there was a second verse you could of ko'd him on this alone! But poetic had a much nicer flow and better punches so he gets my vote easy but came close to knocking himself out!