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[Da Press]

New here - lemme know what ya think.. thought I'd start light.



Soon as I leave the tarmac
I’m hearing the wings snap
Like damn, you sure them shits ain’t gonna crack
But the belt's done up now, ain't no goin' back

Sure, there’s some crazy fucks out there
They absolutely love soaring up there in the air
And get all excited about fika-fika-flyin’
Oh yeah, mothafucka? I’m scared of d-d-d-dyin!



Terror or turbulence - make to difference
Paranoid like chronic but I don’t smoke no hydroponic
I'm flyin again but I ain’t got no wings
Like Tom Petty said, it’s da hardest thing
I try to fall asleep but I can’t hit da sack
Cuz I’m not sure all em dudes had they shoes checked

Then the plane banks too sharp
And I can see the ground
I wanna call my momma but ain’t no phone around
The stweardess tell me, ‘don’t worry sir,
The pilot’s trained to fly up here.’


I’m like, ‘Oh yeah? He look a bit like a slob.
I betcha that motherfucker drinks on the job.’
She like, ‘sir calm down, everything’s okay.’
‘Then why the plane shakin? Get the fuck away!’

And then there’s the landin’
Don’t even get me started
Kids wanna look out the window?
They gotta be retarded.



More snappin and poppin’
All the time we be droppin’
And then we hit
And I take a shit
The plane finally lands
And I need some new pants

[Father N Dangerous]

ummmmm...its about u being on a plane then taking a shit when it lands.

vocab was easy and flow was a bit off 3/10

[denaturat]

you tell a story, which is cool, a bit awkward with the flow, I agree with dangerous, should have posted some of your other shit which is way better man. not a good representation of your writing ability and talent. bigups to dub!

[denaturat]

bro, if you want to battle, open a new thread. Dub vs the volcano, aaaight!

[jjh_38]

hmm.. i disagree with this dude about the flow.. i thought your flow was on point for the most part.. in fact.. that was the best part of the verse IMO.. the lyrics were kinda.. blah.. i thought.. but nobody should underestimate the ability to hold a flow... yu got that...

I try to fall asleep but I can’t hit da sack
Cuz I’m not sure all em dudes had they shoes checked

--- thought that line was pretty tight... even tho it dont rhyme......still liked it fo some reason... ? ?

the verse you posted right after that tho.... this...

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Then the plane banks too sharp
And I can see the ground
I wanna call my momma but ain’t no phone around
The stweardess tell me, ‘don’t worry sir,
The pilot’s trained to fly up here.’

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ugh... that sucked man
waddn't feelin it....

anywho... feedbacks usually pretty weak on this site so no hard feelins.. JMO

peace