you put your worthless 2 cents in any thread i make, i return the favor
you put your worthless 2 cents in any thread i make, i return the favor
^^thank you......
Line for line there's a lot going on as far as rhyming. I'd say use that talent tworard more of a story telling verse, I know your good with that.
But overall i'd say these rhymes are pretty good, I'd just say to try and kick it up a notch by envolving more emotion in your work.
yo homie ya flow is ridicuolous!!!
strong lyrics as well, and you can deffenitly tell a storie
that track about ya boy was nice as hell
keep writtin i love checkin out ya shit
~1~
"When I die bury me with the LO on...Official to the death for all eternity and so on"Lo Down & Dirty" WASTED ON THE USUAL WIT MOM DUKES WAITIN ON THE FUNERAL""MY MOUSTACHE LIKE ADOLFS"-Ghostface
^^^^Cheers man, much appreciated.....
Anyone else care to comment on the last verse?
peace
it sucked fuckin dingo dick
^^cheers for the original insult......
7.5 outa 10, try usin more metaphors, your rhymin is on point.Originally Posted by Robert
The dealer of hope is selling me lies
Reasons to live are reasons to die, in disguise
This life was never mine, the rivers never ran
Cross your arms, its too late for helping hands
Spit your pity elsewhere, there's no sympathy needed
For one who's never alive, for one who's never completed (Bigot Hitman)
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